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    dots Submission Name: My Goddessdots
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    Author: Drizzt
    ASL Info:    18/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 141/154/32
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 352
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    Bytes: 1347



    Description:
       Another poem dedicated to Jessica, I liked this one, which could be a good thing, or it could just mean I have been awake too long (which I have) Let me know what you think and PLEASE point out ANYthing that you think could use improvement, even if (read: especially) it's something like spelling or grammar. My nerves were shot at the time I did this and I can't type very well at the moment.
    -drizzt


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    dotsMy Goddessdots
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    Her eyes are like dawn,
    But her hair is all dusk:
    Its auburn tints flowing down
    Over soft round breasts
    Which sometimes could be pillows
    To unworthy hands;
    If only the hands didn't know,
    That they were indeed unworthy.
    Moving down past her immaculate waist,
    Stopping to admire her perfect hips:
    Wide, but not too wide,
    The kind of hips
    That make a man
    Crawl on his knees.
    The hips support her backside,
    Which is soft in appearance
    And firm to the touch.
    Subliminally it supplements her sexy thighs.
    (What lies between them will remain unspoken of,
    But just know that it is good.)
    Moving down again,
    Her calves are no less outstanding
    Perfectly toned, and unmarred
    By blemish or by scar.
    They serve to display the feet,
    Which are small and dainty.
    These feet are the kind
    Which shoe stores won't display,
    For to cover them
    With cloth or with leather,
    Would be a crime against beauty.

    Her body overall sings fo both happiness and sorrow.
    It has seen troubles and pain
    But she continues to radiate,
    Continues to shine
    With the glory of all the gods,
    Placed into one divine female.




    Submitted on 2004-11-29 06:58:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well. this is slightly cliché, but since I've written the same thing - it'd be hypocritcal for me to say anything against it. The one part that did stand out for me was how each body part is holding up or supprting or connected to antoher. Its obvious, but it was okay here - kinda like the whole 'head bone's connectd to the neck bone' thing.
    shard
    | Posted on 2004-11-29 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]



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