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    dots Submission Name: Letting Go And Saying Good-Byedots

    Author: grinninggashes
    ASL Info:    17/f/from sumwhere :)
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 154/124/25
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       I wrote this a little over 2 years ago after me and my ex had an ugly break up. Now im hapy but it was a hard time then!

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    dotsLetting Go And Saying Good-Byedots

    As I struggle to let you go
    into the world of the unknown
    I watched you slowly walk away
    wishing that I wasn't here today
    I want to be by your side
    and use you as my guid
    I think I'll be lost without you,
    if only you'd think the same way to
    On my birthday I sat alone
    and spoke in a very eary tone
    hating everyone and everything
    wishing that your love didnt' mean a thing
    but thats the problem it did
    I even cried like a little kid
    but i actually had people that cared
    they were there for me when I was sad, happy or scared
    I almost lost some because of you
    I guess our love wasnt' so true
    We talked about getting married
    Now I'm thinking of the kids i coulda carried
    My future use to look beautiful
    now I can't even wait for my funeral
    we coulda grew old together
    you coulda kept me warm in cold weather
    Well this is good-bye forever

    Submitted on 2004-11-29 16:29:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good job describing what a lot of people have failed at. Great descriptions of the mixed feelings the go with a break-up. From a guy's perspective, I felt a lot like that with my X. It's really hard to look to the future, but it's still bright.
    | Posted on 2005-02-09 00:00:00 | by elitegundam | [ Reply to This ]
      one more thing on the word guide you had forgotten to write the I thought if you put that it could help it better to go with side. lol well later
    love christina akak babyface
    | Posted on 2004-12-10 00:00:00 | by POETRY | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey this is christina this poem is so beautiful if your ex saw this he could see what he had missed. This was really good. The rhythm went along so well as to the rhyming sesational perfect I could never rhyme each single line in my poems crazy huh? but thats what I am here for ...help this was really good it is going in my favs. I like basicly all of your poems.
    love christina aka babyface
    | Posted on 2004-12-10 00:00:00 | by POETRY | [ Reply to This ]
      awwww man... ive read so many break up poems on this site and some of them have been absolute crap but this was good... im glad you are moved on and happy now and its always interesting to look back to these moments of our lives and see just how far we have come.
    you got a few spelling errors in here... nothing too big though... when i read the first coupla lines all i could think of was that line "and when you leave... walk away backwards so i can fool myself you are just arriving..." watching someone walk out of our lives can be the most painful thing ever... thanx for sharing
    | Posted on 2004-12-07 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      heh. i broke up with a guy i'd have written that poem for about a year ago. lol i had the exact same feelings for him...eh. it was really horrible getting over him. but hey we all go through it..and find someone new eventually
    | Posted on 2004-11-29 00:00:00 | by graffitijeans | [ Reply to This ]
      aww... let me guess, Ryan? I think you have been thinking about him a little much lately, but hey, you can't help it... I think about my ex also... you know... but anyways, this is very good, it has a terrific flow, but not a whole lot of imagery, I think that it would be more interesting and more grabbing if you described some of your feelings with colors and textures. Great job
    | Posted on 2004-11-30 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, I'm gonna have to add this to my favorites now! it's really good, it expresses my situation exactly! great job.
    | Posted on 2004-12-01 00:00:00 | by AmandaLyn | [ Reply to This ]

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