Cool idea. I get where you were going with this, and I don't take it literally to mean that he can control you completely. But the play with dolls and puppets and such is very clever and fun to read. I envy you on this one because I bet you had a lot of fun writing it as well. I've been too, too easy lately, gushing with everyone, so I'd love to criticise something here, but I just can't. There are a few lines where I'dlike to see you use a little more imagination, but that's up to you. I typically write something, then challenge every line to see if I might have been lazy here or there. Still, there's always changes that can be made. No need here...it's great as it is. I look forward to reading more of you soon.
the descroptions in this are amazing in most places. i didnt understand what you wouldn't stop doing and then with the last line it all fitted togther, I can be me myself Alive and breathing Wrapped tight in your arms Hold me close forever Kiss all my fears away And I will never stop