Hey I liked this poem! Although it is written in a slightly depressing way (it is after all a poem about death.), I think what made this poem really good was that you had that really important message that you wanted to send out to the readers, which was to cherish life:
Cherish life because the gift is rare But donít grasp onto it too tight Consider the ones of which you care And protect them with all your might
This stanza portrayed that directly (it's my favourite stanza :)). Unlike many other poems about dying/death, this one was, in my opinion, special because it didn't just tell about how dying was like, why did the persona die. It told us that death cannot be ignored. There is a vital lesson to learn from death, yet, as clear as the lesson may be, some people still tend to not see it and dismiss death as only something that "will eventually happen".
A very simple yet powerful poem. Your words are words of influence that can change other people's lives. It is through this poem that people will see the real value of life. I agree that some people avoid to talk about death because they are afraid to die, and some talk too much of death because they are afraid to live. Such an ironic world we have, but despite all that we still struggle to live what everybody calls "life". Great work.
Very nice. I liked your thoughts on death-not just fearing them, but really knowing them and valuing life. Too many people take life for granted and live carelessly. While others, choose to live in fear of dying and miss out on so much. A good read:}