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    dots Submission Name: The Corddots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Corddots
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    If the road disappeared behind you
    would you find your way back to me?
    Because with each inch
    you move away from me,
    I fade a little
    liike a light bulb that dims
    in a thousand stages
    instead of the stereotypical three,
    but I never dull completely
    because life offers no mercy.
    I suppose that when you get
    to where you're going
    I'll be like the moon
    which only shines
    because it reflects the earth
    that gets its light from the sun,
    but my third hand gleam
    is stronger than your cruelty,
    and new sources of light
    will gather around me
    because my darkened beauty
    will attract them
    like opposing magnetic poles
    and I'll cut our dysfunctional cord
    forever.





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    ||| Comments |||
      The symbolic imageries here are very effective...I like the rhetorical question in the beginning...I really like this...U could make use of some puntuations here...it will really boost the atmosphere.APOLLO!
    | Posted on 2004-03-19 00:00:00 | by APOLLO | [ Reply to This ]
      a longer poem than usual, but the images are beautiful again. I like it. it's a really good one.
    | Posted on 2004-03-19 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      Fabulous write. I agree with Minstrel, that entire section was outstanding. I need to go back in your catalogue some time, see what other goodies you have for me.
    Aaron
    | Posted on 2004-03-19 00:00:00 | by KrimsonReaper | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. As a whole, it's just so deep...sad too :( but then again not sad.
    "I'll be like the moon
    Which only shines
    Because it reflects the earth
    That gets its light from the sun
    But my third hand gleam..."<--------this whole part was super well thought out and blew me away. Well put.
    ~Minstrel~
    | Posted on 2004-03-18 00:00:00 | by MusingMinstrel | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem really confused me alot...I cannot say I fully grasped well...any of it! Between stereotypical light bulbs (other than those GE 3 ways bulbs) and the direction of the poem (epecially dysfunctional cord...say what?) Not to say that I've never written a confusing poem...shyeah...most of mine are.
    -MyX
    | Posted on 2004-03-18 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, you never cease to amaze me, very wide spectrum, in my opinion, you're most talented writer on this site! bravo!
    | Posted on 2004-03-18 00:00:00 | by pestiferous | [ Reply to This ]


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