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    dots Submission Name: Kicking and Screaming as...dots

    Author: Mithrandir
    ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452/681/113
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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       The full name is "Kicking and Screaming as We Fall in Love" I dunno it's silly and stupid but I wrote it and I like it for some reason. I guess it's me not being negative of falling in love so that why I felt the need to post it...Definatley not as strong as other pieces of mine but what ever.

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    dotsKicking and Screaming as...dots

    Sick of running
    This is where I plant my feet

    I can hold my own

    Come on
    Kick me
    Kiss me
    You know you want me

    So sick of running
    This is where I plant my feet

    I can hold you

    come on
    stop kicking
    and kiss me
    you know you want to

    Never gonna run again
    Foot falls next to yours

    So come on

    Let me hold you
    And when your ready
    Kiss you
    You know you want this

    Submitted on 2004-11-30 17:24:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yeah it does make me alittle curious. I dont know there is just something that is weird about this, Not that its a bad wierd. I think if it went a little longer. Go with this somewhere.
    good write though.
    | Posted on 2004-11-30 00:00:00 | by Lachesis | [ Reply to This ]
      NOT silly and stupid!
    True not the strongest of your pieces, but that does not mean it is no good ;)

    I like it actually...gives the feeling like you're willing to give it a try...like finally saying enough of the running and hiding time to try...even if it takes awhile.

    Yes...this is a hope filled dream of reality...
    I LIKE IT!
    Good to see John ;)

    Be Well You
    Take Care
    | Posted on 2004-11-30 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this John...it's a life drama unfolding before our eyes but the kind where no hlods are barred and lives change for better or worse afterwards, but the unequivically change. I'm not sure why or what prevents this from being a smashing poem...it's good but not as good as it maybe should be with a smashing them like this...maybe it's that it seems to have a tad too much structure....I think that's it...good stuff. Enjoyed
    | Posted on 2004-12-01 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      Aw, I knew you had a sweet center like an M&M. This is very cute. Yeah, most girls do play hard to get, but they give in eventually. This is so different from your usual stuff, but I knew you had it in you.
    | Posted on 2004-12-01 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      that was hella cute
    and i like dit a lot beucase i lvoe th eidea of fighting to love
    its really sweet
    slightly repetative
    and i guess not as strong as your usual stuff
    is there any way to make it stronger?
    i love it
    | Posted on 2004-12-01 00:00:00 | by scorpio sphinx | [ Reply to This ]

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