Nicely done, I do see some grammatic errors but I like the message. I can feel where u are coming from and in my opinion, a true poet makes the reader feel something, like a good story or movie, we wanna feel what the writer was feeling. Again very well done
This is a very strong piece Sanam. I feel from this and your past work you may have a yearning for the 'Dark side' or perhaps a better discription would be the 'unknown'. This work seems to be an affirmation of that choice. I enjoyed your walk down the lane as you veered from being scared to relishing the naughtiness of it all. Well done. I think the others pointed out there are some grammatic errors so I will not. Love diamond
It reminds me of Robert Frost's work. I liked it. It rhymed, and for some reason, I don't particularly enjoy rhymed poetry, but I really enjoyed it this time! Good poem. I can't think of anything I didn't like!
The poems message is good. That we all make decissions in life and never know if it was the right one, but our hearts usually have a way of letting us know. I see you from Germany, so english is at least your second language. That would explain some of the grammar errors. I'm not going to list them here, you may not be interested. But if you are, I would be more than pleased to offer some assisstance.
Good. Everybody does get to a point in their life and they need to chose which path they will walk. Sounds like you chose the right one for you. Even though you got scared you still stuck with it, kept walking, and ended up being just fine. Good write.
These are the few things that I see as mistakes dimly in this case should be dim Dim is an adjective, which is what you are looking for in this case describing the story. Dimly is an adverb-as in the story shone dimly.
Scaring I think should be scary. Again- scary would be an adjective describing the street. Scaring is a verb implying that someone is scaring the street or the street is scaring someone.
incessant - in this case should be incessantly If you were using it without the long as-the road was unsmooth and incessant you would be describing the road, in this case you are describing and stressing the long so you need the"ly"
English they tell me is one of the most complicated languages to learn, you have done very well in expressing your feelings in a language that you are not so familiar with.
Submission Name: The lane
