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    dots Submission Name: Touchdots
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    Author: grinninggashes
    ASL Info:    17/f/from sumwhere :)
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 154/124/25
    Words: 18
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1517
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    Description:
       This is just a little something i was fooling around with wasnt' tryin to be real serious with it. So whatever lol


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    Touch me Once,
    Kiss My Breast
    Touch Me Twice,
    Kiss My Thigh
    Touch me wrong bid you good-bye




    Submitted on 2004-12-01 13:04:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Short ,Sweet and to the point...
    Gotta respect your point of view here.
    I first thought this was gonna get real sexy and all that and then...BAM!
    Good job...keep writing...
    ~Doc!
    | Posted on 2005-01-20 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      haha, very cute, i like it. it gets the point across. nice job, its a fun poem! ill read some of your other poems and see if i can give you some feedback better than this. i really liked it though. catch ya later!
    -mandy
    | Posted on 2005-02-26 00:00:00 | by trmbngrl | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a gem of a single line stanza 1 verse... Timmy has done his fair share of short & quirky image rich single stanza &/or short pieces...

    Check out these short beauties i have here hun they are fantastic (:SmiLeS:)...

    http://www.eliteskills.com/z/3005 <-[Wishes Three]

    http://www.eliteskills.com/z/2998 <-[Small & Bonus Piece <- [Kiss Me Timmy]

    http://www.eliteskills.com/z/2980 <-[The Park]

    http://www.eliteskills.com/z/38426 <--[They]

    These are just a couple of relatively short and powerful poems and/or verse, let me know what you think of this assortment :P

    Timmy S. Edgar






    http://www.eliteskills.com/u/Timmy%20S.%20Edgar
    | Posted on 2004-12-19 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]
      I think your poem was great .It was short and to the point.I especially liked the last line you wrote."Touch me wrong bid you goodbye"
    | Posted on 2004-12-10 00:00:00 | by shombray | [ Reply to This ]
      short, cute and too the point,,made me smile,but it funny you won't see men saying that,lol

    Keep writing your doing a great job.
    | Posted on 2004-12-08 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Straight to the point...I like the ending and the way you are going...at first you give chances but when the gets too far he's gone
    | Posted on 2004-12-01 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ]
      Straight to the point...I like the ending and the way you are going...at first you give chances but when the gets too far he's gone
    | Posted on 2004-12-01 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ]
      this looks like one of those things you'd see in a random away message, or on a silly key chain at the mall, but its cute. the only thing i see if the way you made the last line long. if i may...

    Touch me Once,
    Kiss My Breast
    Touch Me Twice,
    Kiss My Thigh
    Touch me wrong
    Bid you good-bye

    i think that would have flowed better. and kept with the who "touch me" flow. just a thought though. cute. honestly. very fun to read.
    | Posted on 2004-12-01 00:00:00 | by Printer Shock | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem was so cute. I loved the way it made the girl in control. I especially love your last line. It's wonderful really. I like the playful words and the bluntness. Passion comes in may forms and getting straight to the point is one of them
    ~Jane
    | Posted on 2004-12-01 00:00:00 | by Jane Lost | [ Reply to This ]
      lmao... sounds like something I would say to ben... he has all the right touches though so I don't have to worry about that...nice!
    | Posted on 2004-12-02 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]
      This was cute! Short and vicious. Great imagination. Touches can be good or bad. This was a good poem to laugh from. Not too many of those anymore.
    | Posted on 2004-12-03 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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