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Slip, Sliding Away


Author: arkay
ASL Info:    50+/m/Atl.Can
Elite Ratio:    4.84 - 450 /320 /56
Words: 24
Class/Type: Poetry /Comedy
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A Tanka, but not about me ;)

Has to be the weather.


Slip, Sliding Away





Stepping out on ice,
Falling flat on his fanny-
Slipping and sliding.
Maintaining a sense of pride
No longer his great desire.




Submitted on 2004-12-02 10:38:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a clever tanka! :D
Kinda funny how momentum and inertia make abstract ideas like pride fly out the window, eh?
thanks for a lighthearted read. :)
| Posted on 2004-12-02 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
  Cool poem...self preservation comes before pride and his first concern becomes getting off alive...great metaphor for life. Enjoyable on many levels
| Posted on 2004-12-02 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
  Certain wisdom there. There are certainly things we need worse than pride, like just about everything. In fact pride is probably a much greater liability than most realize.
Never heard of a tanka, is that a particular form?
Dave
| Posted on 2004-12-02 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
  From the title I thought this would be a little more Paul Simon. There's a lot of alliteration, and that's always good. This is how I felt once after running into a radiator pipe where I used to work.
| Posted on 2004-12-02 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


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