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    dots Submission Name: Ken Dolldots
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    Author: hidden lady
    ASL Info:    28/female/nebraska
    Elite Ratio:    4.47 - 116/118/30
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1026
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       A girl and A guy meat but not as you think


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    dotsKen Dolldots
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    Look at her,
    a voice trails through
    the silver halls of hate.
    A pretty ken doll stands
    in her way to freedom.
    Rage appears at the end
    of her arms,
    followed by the secret
    streaming water,
    found in her forest
    Green windows
    that attach
    the world to her mind.

    The ugliness that ensued
    became beauty and rhythm.
    Poetry in red, black and blue.

    Look at him,
    a voice trails through
    the silent whispering halls.
    A rag doll stands over him.
    A mole kissing the ground.
    Such a pretty ken doll.




    Submitted on 2004-03-19 11:24:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      a few typos but not bad work, actually, the ken doll is being kicked to the curb for another.
    | Posted on 2004-03-19 00:00:00 | by pestiferous | [ Reply to This ]


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