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    dots Submission Name: End to Paindots

    Author: Dark_Dancer
    ASL Info:    18/F/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    3.44 - 174/164/96
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Prose/Depressed
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       Wrote this a few years ago.

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    dotsEnd to Paindots

    I was an angel, and I have fallen. My broken, severed wings lie bleeding on the ground. I stroke these fading memories of what I used to know. Instead of eternal bliss, I now feel this world, and I lift these hollow gray eyes in a silent prayer for the end. I sit on high in my own little world, drunken with the pain, stoned on depression, and wonder how far it is, from my throne to the world's, how far down people really are. I sit atop a building, watching the cars pass by, watching people huddle under their umbrellas as the rain drops to earth. I wonder what the distance is between myself and them, and if I have what it takes to close that razor-sharp gap.
    I feel the rain, the cleansing, merciful rain. It helps to sluice away the problems of the day. The thunders drowns the echoing voices, the memories that play like broken records. The lightning sears away the phantoms and blinds those that scream and yell, silencing them. The rain erases the hurt. Now what, I wonder, can keep it away?

    Submitted on 2004-12-02 14:54:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was cool and very unexpected... ilove it. not so short and not so simple but still beautiful. wow it is a little complicated at first but still an awesome piece of work.
    love tina
    | Posted on 2004-12-02 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      a very touching and emotion groupings of words.
    ur discription is quite different- for some reason this poem gave me an insight or moreover a vivid image of a woman faced down on a pavement hurt, this pome has great imagination to it and its deep.
    tho i think i found a typo:
    It helps to sluice away the problems...
    i think u meant:
    it helps to 'slice' away the problems...
    but n-e way very in depth and awesome poem.
    | Posted on 2004-12-02 00:00:00 | by dannyshyboy | [ Reply to This ]

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