Duplicitious Fervor by Lightbringer

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Author:	Lightbringer
ASL Info:	25/M/under your couch
Elite Ratio:	4.63 - 188/210/36
Words:	52

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	383
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	378

Description:
I don't know exactly what my inspiration for this piece was I just sat down to write and this is what happened. So that said, feel free to interpret this however you would like. All comments are welcomed and encouraged. This piece is all about perspective and could mean just about anything that's why I like it.

Duplicitious Fervor dots

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Bold and insightful,
Alluring and strong,
Calling to heaven
“How can this be wrong?”
They kill for the pleasure,
Make war out of peace,
Armies of heathens
Asking God for release.
Destruction and genocide,
In the name of a wraith.
Go ahead,
Wear your cross,
But it won’t keep you safe………

Submitted on 2004-12-02 16:47:19 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This seems to be about a 'holy war' being fought for wrong reasons by christians, but the first two lines sort of throws me a bit. They are beautifully worded, but somehow seem in contradiction to or out of place with the rest of the poem. I'm not sure who or what you are describing in those two lines. Is it refering to the christians who are fighting this holy war or the reasons for going to war? If that's the case, somehow, insightful just doesn't seem to jibe there, at least for me anyways.

The last three lines seem more like a threat or promise of retaliation/retribution said under breath by one on the other side of that war - and it's funny in that there are people who do wear crosses thinking that it will keep them safe, and I know there are some who will swear that it has protected them. The same could be said about other objects too - for example good luck charms. (let's not forget 'lucky underwear' LOL) etc. people can be very superstitious in their beliefs. (May be a good topic for debate in the forums sometime.) With some religions, it's had to interject reason.

I thought it was pretty good write overall.

| Posted on 2004-12-08 00:00:00 | by timberwolf720 | [ Reply to This ]
  hmmm... this writing makes u think. the way u formated everything in just a few short sentences/stanzas is truly artistic. as i read this i thought of like a romeo and juliet situation then as i continued to read i thought of a murderer and so forth and i don't think ive read a poem that made me disperse completely different things and merge them together.
awesome write...
-danny
| Posted on 2004-12-02 00:00:00 | by dannyshyboy | [ Reply to This ]
  I like that you are not cramming anything except insecurity down our throats with this one. I read this with a political bent but that's just because of the reference to war and chrisitanity. It made me think of Holy Wars. And all that's done in the name of God. Nicely done.
jan
| Posted on 2004-12-02 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
  awsome write.
I dont know what they were talking about it didnt make me think. But I liked it
my favorite part
Destruction and genocide,
in the name of a wraith.
Dont know why, I just liked it
Kacey
| Posted on 2004-12-03 00:00:00 | by Lachesis | [ Reply to This ]

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