"You can only understand a person
if you feel them in yourself."
Well, you're in every pigment
that flows from this dangerous pen.
I'm using your empty veins
to sew these eyes open.
I can see now.
And that halo on your head
is quickly slipping.
Your words took the perfect form,
but your skin is cracking now
and your bones are snapping.
You're no angel.
I know that now
and I'm going to let you bend and break
because I refuse to piece this lie back together this time.
'that halo on your head is quickly slipping off.' okay that line stuck with me. i like the idea that it doesn't just go out...it kinda slides away. Kind of like when you lose faith in someone...it kinda feels like they're slipping away. Broken Angel...nah too broad a title. i agree...you can only understand a person if you can see part of them in yourself.
This has a lot of interesting images. I like how you say this person is in the ink. I like the idea of using veins to sew eyes open (It sounds like something that would be on Itchy and Scratchy from the Simpsons). I think I'd say slipping over "slipping off" because it doesn't lose any meaning, and ending a sentence with a preposition is grammatically incorrect.