It's an artform that nobody understands
Briefer than fireworks yet more memorable than music
Plainer than photography yet daintier than dance
Louder than drama yet subtler than pencil shades
More frustrating than tapestry---
Tou created some great parallels here...I enjoyed reading the main body, wondering what the "it" was, and then being rewarded with a simple and honest answer at the end. This really does have a serene feel to it.
Tou...you...you know what I mean. I am french but...hurrah for typos - where would writers be without them? In addition to my previous comment: when you described your subject as being more memorable that music I was like, hmmm...not sure about that. Good music just has this way of staying with you...but yes, life would definitely top that. Nice work.
Like Jemma I enjoyed the serene feel to this. I don't know that I agree with all of your parallels, but what would life be without differences - certainly not a tapestry. I could not guess until the end. I really like this.
" Serenity now! " A little "seinfeld" joke there. I dont find life to be serene at all but rather a violent turrent of unease. Though enjoyed your poem.
Submission Name: Serenity
