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    dots Submission Name: Pieces of You (Revised)dots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I submitted this earlier, but I've revised it, so you may want to read the old version.

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    dotsPieces of You (Revised)dots

    Looking around for pieces of you:
    a book, a shirt, a thought you left behind.
    I found your fragrance behind the bookcase as I dusted.
    Your face haunts my mind.
    Sometimes I swear I feel your weight beside me in bed,
    feel you move the covers,
    feel you in the lead-heavy air that hangs above me.
    You haunt my mind,
    but I know that you're a dream--
    pieces of a man that used to be--
    pieces stuck in the cobwebs of my mind.

    Submitted on 2004-03-19 19:06:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      only some little alterations I found, but it's good. I especially like the 2nd line. great.
    | Posted on 2004-03-20 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      very good lil piece, I liked it a lot, but when I first clicked I expected you rewrote Jewels song Peices of You.
    | Posted on 2004-03-19 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]

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