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    dots Submission Name: Shouting From Roof Topsdots
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    Author: Mithrandir
    ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452/681/113
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 743
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       yeah this is silly and I wrote it really quickly
    but it made me smile and Im in a good mood so I decided to post this....Rip it apart I really don't care. ITs probably stupid and someone will probably tell me the cliché pieces of it.
    Take from it what you will this is a happy piece so I don;t feel its anywhere near as strong as my normal writes since its happy. Whatever its sleepy time


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    dotsShouting From Roof Topsdots
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    Were shouting it
    from roof tops
    as the amber waves
    fade to grey

    Shouting from roof tops
    so you might understand
    This is the answer
    to the half hearted man

    Lighting the candle
    untouched by the wind
    no tears to drown
    the fire

    Were shouting it
    from roof tops
    from the back seats
    of mini vans

    Shouting till
    our throats hurt
    So you might understand
    this isn’t just another
    silly love song




    Submitted on 2004-12-05 00:36:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i used to feel that way when i was with this one guy but now i feel as if i want to shout to him how much i love him and never wanted to let him go. i wish the best with this relationship i hope that yours works out better than mine did. i dont want to sound negiative or anything but always be aware of what is happening between the two of you trust me you dont want to wake up one day and realize what a fool you are for letting him go and not knowing what has happend. but on a happier note it was a good poem and if you keep wirting like this then you could become a famous poet one of these days.
    | Posted on 2004-12-05 00:00:00 | by rose_thorn88 | [ Reply to This ]
      We are, we’re not Were shouting it… I could bash it- but why? You told me to- takes any fun out of it- lolfull! Happy Holidays and all that- I’ma check out some other works of yours… (((some ppl want to fill the world up- with silly love songs))) But what’s wrong with that? I need to know- because here I go
    again

    Peace, love and I can’t wait to get drunk thys week- ~#6-
    | Posted on 2004-12-05 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey!
    I really enjoyed this. This should be a song! :) This was my favorite part,
    "Lighting the candle
    untouched by the wind
    no tears to drown
    the fire"
    It just sounds cool. I like this format too. It's different but simple. :) Really good write. It made me happy that's for sure. Good job.
    -blt
    | Posted on 2004-12-06 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]


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