Hahaha! Oh this is good, very good indeed! Mondays just suck soooo bad and you have done a brilliant job of describing them! You could have gone on and on with this and still probably wouldn't have been any better than it already is! I like that the ending is so unexpected! Catches ya off guard! Good stuff! Take care.
I take it you work in a office setting or that is what this is aimed at. Robots would be the computers, copiers, faxes and all that other BS. The zombies and prisoners kinda fall into the same place as they are the lower level workers who have to do the sh it jobs and become dazed by mind numbing tasks. The overseers would probably have to be management. And yes I think mondays suck too. ever heard the song "Mondays Suck" its pretty funny, but I wouldn't listen to it at work.
this is great man. its short and concise yet it has a definite tone, theme and thought. the ending came as a surprise maybe thats why i liked the poem, because of the unexpected conclusion and how the poem holds together. great work! keep it up!
This is an ok write. I do think that you could add to it and make it a little more imaginative. Anymore, poems are predictable but this had the good twist at the end. Where do you work?Good write though
Hahaha man, monday's SUCK. Reading this piece amde me smile, because its a monday and like usual I'm hating life.
Anyway I loved the idea behind this piece, and with your amazing writing abilities i believe you could definitely extend this and make it into some long tortured tale with a "mondaY' being the ending. But thats only if you're crazy enoguh to do something I suggest, haha.