6 Steps to Eternal Sunshine by brunov68

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Submission Name: 6 Steps to Eternal Sunshine dots

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Author:	brunov68
ASL Info:	22/M/Toronto
Elite Ratio:	4.34 - 311/320/30
Words:	123

Class/Type:	Poetry/Happy
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This seems like a good recipe for happiness to me. I know most of you will disagree, please share your thoughts or feelings or both. Thanks!!

6 Steps to Eternal Sunshine dots

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Never feel:
But if you happen to be too human,
at least have control,
over your response to the emotion in question.

Have talent:
Know how to do, at least,
three things better than anyone
you might ever come across.

Be apathetic:
About all, all things
or people or things,
that do not care for you.

Quit working jobs:
These bring routine, which,
as the mother of the causes of depression
ruins your will to be (period)

Travel very much a lot:
Since you will then be able
to recognize the endless and incessant,
beauty of our world.

Dream like the inventive,
creative human you are
while living like the courageous,
fearless being you strive to be.

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  this is interesting...and I am going t agree with you on every single one of these ideas that you put forth, but the point of life is not to be happy, but to leave a legacy and to better the world with your life. remember, we will all eventually die, and we can't take anything with us, and our happiness won't matter in the end...a life time is not as long as it seems. peace be with you.

In His service,
shuford
| Posted on 2004-12-06 00:00:00 | by littleshuford | [ Reply to This ]
  Travel very much a lot:

this line doesnt make sense but i think that could be a translational issue if english isnt your first language...
i like this poem... some parts (like quitting your job) are completely unrealistic but i do see what you are getting at and i love it... they surely are steps to a great life full of happiness and sunshine... and now that you have worked out the 6 steos to eternal sunshine are you living them...?
| Posted on 2004-12-06 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  "beauty of our world."
there is no such thing. our world is far from beautiful. im also not one to critisize on spelling and wording and stuff because i dont worry bout it when i write. but yeah this poem could use a little help in that category. but all in all you did good job on getting your point across. and those 6 steps are so very true good job
| Posted on 2004-12-06 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]
  I completely disagree with this, all the way around. I will analyze what I disagree with, though.

Never feel:
But if you happen to be too human,
at least have control,
over your response to the emotion in question.

You have to feel something. Even with apathy, where you shut the emotion out, sometimes emotion will get in. And someone who doesn't feel can't be happy.

Have talent:
Know how to do, at least,
three things better than anyone
you might ever come across.

You can't just up and have talent, you're either born with it or you aren't. (I know I wasn't.) And three things better than anyone? Just know how to do what you like, in your field. To me, knowing how to do three things better isn't that important.

Be apathetic:
About all, all things
or people or things,
that do not care for you.

Again, if you don't feel you can't be happy. And not caring about other's opinions of you are fine, but sometimes people won't care about you until you get to know them. If you use apathy all the time, then you won't ever get past that roadblock.

Quit working jobs:
These bring routine, which,
as the mother of the causes of depression
ruins your will to be (period)

Sometimes you need those to get where you want to be. You have to work for what you want, nothing will ever just fall into your lap.

Travel very much a lot:
Since you will then be able
to recognize the endless and incessant,
beauty of our world.

Sometimes people don't like to travel. And our world used to be beautiful, before humans started covering it in industry and ruining our atmosphere with their smog and fog. They cover natures beautiful bounty, and that steals the beauty away. And very much a lot is redundant and doesn't sound right; take away the "a lot" or the "very much".

Dream like the inventive,
creative human you are
while living like the courageous,
fearless being you strive to be.

This is actually okay, but not the same for all people. But the message is to be yourself, which is good.

Overall this is good, because it works for you. It just doesn't work for everyone. Still though, if it works for you, that's what's important.

[]Meredith[]
| Posted on 2004-12-06 00:00:00 | by Maki Kyomada | [ Reply to This ]
  Well I'm glad to see that you are happy- these are you catergories of happiness. Everyone has their own idea of what hapiness is/ should be. And because this poem reflects those ideas I consider it a wonderful write. It's your own interpetation. Everyone isentitled to his/her own opinion. However, the wording was a little confusing. The stanza about traveling is so true because I believe you shoul not stay in one place all your life. You should seek adveture, experience new enviomenrmnts. See the beauty of our wonderful world just as you said:

Travel very much a lot:
Since you will then be able
to recognize the endless and incessant,
beauty of our world.

This was refreshing. Made you think about life. Interesting write Bruno.

~Emily
| Posted on 2004-12-06 00:00:00 | by Emmalee | [ Reply to This ]

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