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    dots Submission Name: Best Friend Thingdots
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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    23/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 365/459/201
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Prose/Happy
    Total Views: 873
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1016



    Description:
       So this one's for Devon Davis. It isn't really something I worked on, it's more like a journal entry of times. So don't criticize it, because no matter what you say it's not changing.


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    dotsBest Friend Thingdots
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    I cannot count the days Iíve been talking to you,
    Or the hours you spent with her.
    Not the times you held hands or embraced
    In the English room.
    However, itís been eight hours since I reentered
    The world of your high laugh for old inside jokes.
    Iím not sure what to feel,
    Since I know that itís been a year since Iíve
    Been over you.
    Iím not sure what to do,
    Now that you and her are over, and youíve
    Eaten all my marshmallows.
    My lunch is cold, my hot chocolate tastes funny,
    And the whip cream has been licked clean with
    Lip glossed mouths. I can only think
    To wrap my arms around you once more,
    And remember how good we were at the whole
    Best friend thing.
    I can only hope that Iíll be able to help you smile again,
    Run my hands through your hair and fix that scowl,
    And start counting the minutes until
    Those marshmellows glue together your broken heart.




    Submitted on 2004-12-07 00:03:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thats a great poem...What amazes me about it actually is the fact that it sounds so innocent and young, and so wise at the same time. You have a wonderful talent and i look forward to reading more of your work

    Blessed Be
    Krysti
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      That's sweet Katie. I didn't know that things were okay between the two of you. But I am so glad they are! OMG, that reminds of last year when someone asked me if Devon and I were going out! I thought it was hilarious! Did you know something thought that? I don't remember who it was though...
    | Posted on 2004-12-08 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      You poor dear. I have no clue why no one will comment on your work. You have amazing skill. And I'm not just saying that because if you've seen some of my other comments on the works on this site, I haven't always been the most sympathetic. I tell people what's what. And I tell you, dear, that you are a great writer and I'm going to add you to my "stalking list." Keep your chin up- people don't like it when people that are younger than them better than they are.
    | Posted on 2004-12-07 00:00:00 | by Bijou de Mort | [ Reply to This ]


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