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    dots Submission Name: A Sink Deeperdots
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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    23/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 365/459/201
    Words: 437
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Alone
    Total Views: 620
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2030



    Description:
       This was originally written for Devon Davis. While writing it I imagined the rich, arrogant young man dressed in white and the confused girl wearing a revealing red dress, and he gets on a train while she's left in the rain crying. [that was a total Whisler explanation there!] Anyway. Now this poem more suits Devon Whisler. Because D.Davis is not rich, arrogant, and he doesn't like white; while I don't wear revealing things, rarely red things, and I wear a dress about twice a year.

    [this is a rare view of my song lyrics. if you like these, i might post others.]


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    We wake ourselves / And throw away the day / Iíd like to scream / And youíd like to go away / To a far and isolated place / Where I canít bother you / To a silent, clean, space / Where thereís everything and nothing to do

    So hereís your ticket / Take the last train / Iím gonna sit here all alone / With my dirt and my pain / Feeling grimy and grungy / An unwanted piece of slime / While your riding away / Feeling oh so fine

    I wanna wash it all away / Everything you ever did / Everything you ever wanted to say / You never said you loved me / You never said youíd try / I never said I was sorry / I never said I wouldnít cry / But itíll take more than this / Because the fall was steeper / To wash away all my dirt / Iím gonna need a sink deeper

    You think youíre so clean / In your washed up bubble / You never do anything / You stay out of trouble / While I live a great life / I take advantage of not having you / To tell me Iím too dirty / Iíve made so many mistakes / You tell me Iím not good enough / But thatís what life takes!

    So sit there all alone / Without me, without love / When you want someone to tell you what life taught them / Iím who youíre thinking of / But you wanted out / You wanted to get away / So I let you sink / What do you want me say? / I have nothing to say

    I wanna wash it all away / Everything you ever did / Everything you ever wanted to say / You never said you loved me / You never said youíd try / I never said I was sorry / I never said I wouldnít cry / But itíll take more than this / Because the fall was steeper / To wash away all my dirt / Iím gonna need a sink deeper

    I wanna wash it all away / Everything you ever did / Everything you ever wanted to say / You never said you loved me / You never said youíd try / I never said I was sorry / I never said I wouldnít cry / But itíll take more than this / Because the fall was steeper / To wash away all of you / Iím gonna need a sink deeper




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      Man I really don't understand why people didn't comment on this either. Well I am cause I completely love these lyrics.. They are so powerful, and I know a lot of people will relate. Cause a lot of people go through horrible breakups. Especailly the one you are goint through. Sometimes guys are werid. They want to get something out of a girl and thats it. Sometimes you never no if it is a bet or not. But instead of breaking up easily they have to go ruff, and they wonder why the girl is so sad.. Then they don't want to be friends anymore. And then life just gets so chaotic. Its really tough..

    But anyways I really loved these lyrics. Very emotional. and I really enjoyed these.

    I LOVED THE CHORUS

    I wanna wash it all away / Everything you ever did / Everything you ever wanted to say / You never said you loved me / You never said youíd try / I never said I was sorry / I never said I wouldnít cry / But itíll take more than this / Because the fall was steeper / To wash away all my dirt / Iím gonna need a sink deeper

    Love love it.

    Stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow Katie. Awesome, I REALLY like that one, a ton!!! That would make a kick butt song (did I just kick butt? wow...)! It seriously would! Do you compose music, or are you like me, and can write down words but not notes? Anyway, totally awesome girl!
    | Posted on 2004-12-08 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know why people aren't commenting on this. They're probably intimidated or something, because this is truly a great piece. You really convey despondency in a beautiful way. Dispair can be a glorious thing, and you've achieved showing this through some amazing skill. Great job, friend.
    | Posted on 2004-12-07 00:00:00 | by Bijou de Mort | [ Reply to This ]


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