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    dots Submission Name: Strokesdots

    Author: solitary_cross
    ASL Info:    19/female/Philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 92/107/24
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       About the art of writing described by a pen being held by his beholder: the writer.

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    An area, a corner
    Where you once pressed me
    A sudden movement
    That got hold of my being

    I lost control
    With my own thoughts
    Hypnotized by your touch
    I followed your lead

    So rigid, so tight
    Never wanting to let go
    Fingers that ran
    Across my labeled form

    Draining my soul slowly
    As you danced your last tango
    Our gestures in harmony
    Moving back and forth

    But the song has to end
    And so should our fantasy
    Your hands set me free
    In abandonment

    An unfading mark
    Made by you
    It was all left unsaid
    In a piece of paper

    Submitted on 2004-12-07 04:54:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I agree while this poem could be taken in a passion sense. It could be about so many other things. It was throwing in different scenes, different ways I could relate to this. It could even represent a platonic relationship, an argument inside yourself even, I think. But, I'm weird. So..go figure.
    | Posted on 2005-01-17 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      Heh, well, i guess it can be about sex but it can also be about other things. I really thought it was about writing but ive always been a bit naive
    Whatever its meaning is, i think it's a good poem and quite sad.

    Aken Sol

    P.S. Good luck with your relationship. I hope everything turns out for the better for you!
    | Posted on 2004-12-15 00:00:00 | by Aken Sol | [ Reply to This ]
      you seem to have captured the true essence of writing here...the beauty that forms from such a simple act is very much like sex in a way...so i believe it makes an effective metaphor...even if it was unintentional. I really like your visual style of presenting emotion...thanks for the read
    | Posted on 2004-12-07 00:00:00 | by littlecoombs | [ Reply to This ]
      i didnt read the descrption, as a matter of policy, and then having read the poem it gives it a totally different message, i really thought it was about having sex with someone for the last time, i know it sounds crude but when you break up with someone the last of everything seems so significant...the last time you kissed, etc. so i thought it was quite clever but didn't understand the 'a corner where you once pressed me' now i do i think that its very interesting how completely different the interpretations could be.
    | Posted on 2004-12-07 00:00:00 | by ellisa | [ Reply to This ]

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