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    dots Submission Name: Your Sunken Placedots
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    Author: Lee
    ASL Info:    29/F/South Africa
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 55/54/14
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 292
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1371



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       Wrote this for a very special friend


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    dotsYour Sunken Placedots
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    Emotional exhaustion beyond anyone's conception
    Locked away living, too scared of rejection

    Life took you for an ultimate roller coaster ride
    And after reaching the top, left you hanging from the side

    Time would mend your aching heart, that's what you thought
    But you kept your pain inside and your soul got caught

    In fear of questions asked, never did you leave behind your smiling mask
    And eating away slowly, was your haunting past

    If you get shot and don't treat the wound, you will surely die
    You got shot and left the wound, now time is ticking by..

    Yes I know, you did open your heart for one more try
    And as there's no guarantee's on people, it turned out to be another lie

    Like you always do, you buried away the problem, with all the rest, in the deepest corner of your mind
    Hoping once again for some peace to find

    Brick for brick you must start breaking down these walls
    Side by side I'll help you, catch you, should you fall

    On a daily basis we're confronted with endless choices to make
    Unfortunately the choice of life is no different..

    'Live life to the fullest
    or
    Don't live at all"




    Submitted on 2004-12-07 06:30:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm sure your friend appreciates your presence, an being there is what life's all about. You express emotions well here, "being taken to the top, left hanging of the side" was it a lost love or manic high? Whatever the case, trusting is difficult, as you say. But we miss life being cocooned and this, your message comes through very well. You also have a lyric style that I admire. thanks for sharing,
    nansofast Welcome to Elite Skills!
    | Posted on 2004-12-08 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      i thought that it was good. i liked the style and the rhyming. it had a good personal feel to it. it has a good message in it, about living life to the fullest. good piece. keep it up.
    | Posted on 2004-12-07 00:00:00 | by maquiladora | [ Reply to This ]



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