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Is it really love? -------------------------------------------
You canít say that your heart has been broken in two
Just because that person didnít say I love you.
You caní t say that your in love with them
If it makes you go crazy and your head starts to spin.
You canít say that you want to be with them for the rest of your life
When you donít have your own life right
You canít say that you can make them change their heart to gold
When their heart is brutal, bitter and cold.
You canít say that you forgive them in a drop of a dime
So they run and do the same thing in time
Hold your head up, donít let them see you down
For they will try to turn your smile into a frown.
They will try to find someone better than you
But know one can be there to love them like you do.
They will try to slide their way back into your heart
It s just a mind game so think smart
The pain of not having them is what hurts most of all
But you canít cry an ocean of tears and stand tall
The one thing that they will always regret
Is losing you and losing your respect.
Last two lines convey a good one two punch...This is so true. You may want to check your spelling on this line "But know one can be there to love them like you do". I have been both at the receiving and giving end similar to this poem. Still recovering from what I am reading.
Well you certainly wrote the truth here in this one. I like that in a writer because some people try to cover the truth in order to make their poem seem more proper or fit in better with society. You laid it all on the line and seems to me you have a great attitude about this sort of thing. Good Write.. !Doc`
you are becomeing one of my favorite writters on here im enjoying your work more and more and would love to see more come from you keep up the good work also what inspires you to write things like this? kristen
i love this poem you have a really good view on love. all that is sed is true they only play with your heart strings and cum bak wen they have no one else. The one thing that they will always regret Is losing you and losing your respect. that is my favourite part as i hope the one i care for will realise that.