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    dots Submission Name: yummdots
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    Author: k kin
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 56/51/12
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       felt like chocolate....


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    dotsyummdots
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    Had a little
    Want some more
    Not just the icing
    But the chocolate core
    One small nibble
    Or a great big bite
    Munching away
    Whether day or night

    Ah! that sugar
    Feels so good
    What this is
    Is heavenly food
    Sinful indulgence
    And lips do lust
    Some more chocolate
    i must , i must




    Submitted on 2004-12-08 03:24:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hehe...who doesn't need a little chocolate every once in a while...yummy...now i want a candy bar maybe a big piece of chocolate cake with lots of frosting...or maybe a big bowl of icecream...yummy...thanks now i'm hungry...lol.,..i enjoyed this sweet write...we need writes like these thrown in the mix of depression , confusion and love...smiles purp
    | Posted on 2004-12-08 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      Awesome. Finally an uplifting poem. I know I'm not aiding in getting the site out of the stage of depression its in. But, I just am not a happy person right now. I'm glad you posted this though. Made me smile. That's saying something.
    ~BCute
    | Posted on 2004-12-08 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      A light refreshing break forom the doom and gloom everyone seems to write...including me i'll admit...thanks for putting something up that i didn't have to pull apart or analyse: i could just enjoy it...you've got great flow there...thanks again for the read: it was highly enjoyable
    | Posted on 2004-12-08 00:00:00 | by littlecoombs | [ Reply to This ]
      now that made me remember how hungry i'm :) its a genuine and refreshing idea.. very well done :) keep that up :) and remember your pen is your mind speaking out on ink
    | Posted on 2004-12-08 00:00:00 | by Tarek Refaat | [ Reply to This ]
      hehe... i know what you mean.. mmm.. chocolate.
    this is a very cute poem... written nicely..
    although good and food dont rhyme so it throws your rhyme scheme off a little...
    they should rhyme though... hehe...
    my ex boyfriend used to always get on my case about my chocolate addiction... or any sweet for the most part... it makes you feel good and its oh, so delicious!
    this is a nice ode to a wonderful snack..
    | Posted on 2004-12-08 00:00:00 | by besodemuerte | [ Reply to This ]
      heheh i got a real kick out of this piece this is well written i wouldnt change a thing in this one i could almost taste it myself i have to admit you wrote of my most favourite foodstuff woohoo thank you so much i enjoyed this
    | Posted on 2004-12-08 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]


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