I like this more every time I read it. I actually don't like the start and the first stanzas at all to be honest. But after: "Haunting control and disgusting perfection <(Loved this btw) have taken away her imperfect reflection."
It almost has no flaws in my mind whatsoever. The ending is FANTASTIC, an amazing finish and such a vividly painted portrait of the vision you are trying to show.
"One brutal attempt to escape the past flung her back to conforming; she would be the last."
Didn't like this parts flow at all though. I like the concept, just not the wording. I think you could fix it to fit in with the rest a lot better if you tried.
Other than that...wow definitely one of my favorite pieces I've ever read. I don't know if it would be if I didn't understand it so well, but it is...so deal with it ;)
excellent write. (sure that's a cheesy comment but it's completley honest) This one had me invisioning a V.C Andrews novel. In her novels the families were always of some type of blue blood with the ancestor pictures hanging on halls protraying only what they wanted, never the truth that is behind the oil on the canvas.
wow, great poem. aside from the changing tenses, this is well-written and organized. i like the idea behind the piece; it's unique, yet it's something that i think most of us can (deep down) relate to on some level. you kept the word choice rather simple, and i think that was a bit detrimental to the imagery. however, this poem is, overall, a great piece. good job, and keep on writing! looking forward to reading more.