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    dots Submission Name: Congratulations to you(Bitter)dots
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    Author: The Black Rose
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 116/111/31
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsCongratulations to you(Bitter)dots
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    Congratulations to you and your lovely wife
    I hope you have a wonderful life
    New home, new kids, everything new
    Though inside I thought it would be me with you

    I wasn't ready to give you away
    You were so mature and I loved to play
    Still I didn't think you'd move on
    Now all hope of us together is gone

    She's so beautiful, and you deserve good love
    I wish I was a better woman giving kisses and hugs
    Instead held my love for you inside
    Should of let go of my foolish pride

    I'll never forget the times we shared
    You holding my hand, damn you really cared
    Emotionally, I shut you out
    You tried to teach me what real love was about

    Now she has you all to herself
    I can't believe you've someone else
    If I wasn't raised right, I know what I would do
    But I was, so congratulations to you!




    Submitted on 2004-12-08 10:20:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I kind of agree with what Christine Hamor had to say. I think this was a pretty decent poem over all. I'm sorry this had to happen to you, but you'll find someone new. and you'll have a new home, new kids, and everything new!
    | Posted on 2005-01-05 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]


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