Description: I am really struggling with deciding which category this write should go into, poetry or lyrics ... love or longing or you left me?? So I would appreicate feedback on the write and on what category and type you think it falls in to. Thanks.
I let down my guard, let you in.
I dropped my clothes but I didn't just bare my body,
I bared my soul.
I trusted you to love me, take care of me.
You saw the things that I have allowed no-one to see.
Now I learn to fall with no safety net to cushion the blow.
For my heart is bruised, there is a mark you have left,
Like a loveheart on a tree.
Youve really captured the vulnerability of women i think with this ...At least i know in my self i see it as a big revealing process to let someone into your "Presence"...And even though feminists all over the world will be bashing at my door ...Its romantic in a sense that the man is in control ..The female is in awe of him...nervous of how he see's her..
Beautiful ...I love your work and i can see it comes from the heart and isnt forced, which makes poetry so special
I enjoyed the emotion and you captured how all women ( mostly) feel in the fact we always feel something holding us back in our bodies. How one false man can damage our frail egos of our person. Never let anyone tell you, you are not worthy or beautiful.. if they can not see the true beauty then the hell with them. I know this feeling... a few months ago...8 I think, I was 304 lbs, today I am 145 lbs. and I get offers from men now that would have nothing to do with me when I was over weight, they could not see I was beautiful before... anyway I loved the poem but in some of the lines I found rhyme then in other I found none. I would change that but over all I loved it. by the way I know the poem was not about that see felt about her body but in my first read that stood out.