I have to say I really like this. It simple and it has a certain feel to it, hard to describe. I especially like the part
Itís like bullets Are swallowed Into these paVemenTs StuDDed with Gold.
Those lines provided such imagery for me, I loved it. One thing though, please go back and fix your typing. It distracts from the words and will cause alot of people to completley forego even reading it. Other than that, good job!