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    Author: Kera
    ASL Info:    18-f-NH
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 116/129/29
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Rant/Misc
    Total Views: 794
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 710



    Description:
       Couldnt think of a title. I used to be sad all the time, but I started looking past that and realized, life isnt all that bad. Happieness comes, but if you always think about what happened or is happening then you lose out on good moents, and before you knwo it, they are gone.

    Defintaly not one of my favorites. But diecided to post it anyway.


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    dots!!!dots
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    So many people talking about the same thing
    Hey, Look! I got the answer, Bing! Bing!
    We all have sorrws we all have pain,
    But think About think about it, what is to gain,
    When we bask in our sorrow,
    And never think about tomorrow?

    Of corse!!Who couldnt think of today?
    Why think of the future anyway?!
    Hey, it might not happen,
    Could be dead tomorrow; right Captain?

    Just In!!Here is some news folks,
    Life isnt all that bad, you blokes!
    Everyone gets sad no matter who you may be,
    You just got to get over it, you see
    Live life to the fullest!
    Because your next moment may be the dullest.




    Submitted on 2004-12-08 23:04:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      must say i agree with you on this thought.. you have to live life and enjoy the little things in it.. if you never did no purpose would really exist.. to really love you have to hate.. to truly laugh you have to cry.. it's strange but in a way it seems true.. getting through the things that are hard in the end make you stronger.. you are able to appreciate the little things far more than you would have been able to.. able to laugh and be happy instead of falling into some sadness you can't pick yourself up from.. lol you have me thinking again which tells me that this again is a good write.. god help me i was thinking lol..
    well i've read all your poems as suggested.. hope you have a good time today..
    all the best and much love..

    Adam
    | Posted on 2004-12-09 00:00:00 | by Pyrosis | [ Reply to This ]
      I won't nit pick on the grammatical errors and misspellings that are traced through this piece like coke on rolling paper. I also won't complain about the not-so-needed forced rhyme. Why?

    Because I don't care anymore. I've read probably 1500 writings on this site now and no one is perfect. Some people just don't care about grammar or punctuation or blah, blah blah.

    So, I'll just talk about the message behind the words instead, because that's all that truely matters.

    You're right. People marvel at the world when things are going their way, and then quickly throw their hands up in disgust when the smallest thing goes wrong. I'm guilty of it; my friends and family are guilty of it; everyone is guilty of it.

    It's somewhat like not asking why a child is born perfectly healthy. You don't question why you were so lucky to have your kid born without medical problems or any unforseen complications. But on the same token, those same people are quick to question why their child suddenly gets cancer, or some other disease that will end their life. Then they ask "Why?!"

    Take the bad and put it to good use. Take the good and expand on it for the future. That's how I took this poem. I don't care what words you used or the extensiveness of your vocabulary. Your message was a good one. Live now, not then.

    Someone commented on one of my pieces one time and said this:

    "Things could be worse. You could be dead, and then you don't have a choice to do anything at all... you're just dead."

    Take life with a grain of salt. Things won't always turn out for the best, but things do seem to work out for one reason or another. Just take it slowly. That's what I've learned the past couple months.

    I've written some harsh things on this site, and I've written some beautiful things as well. Emotions are ever changing; don't let them bite you in the ass.

    Good message.

    Take care,
    Rob
    | Posted on 2004-12-08 00:00:00 | by Me Rambling | [ Reply to This ]


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