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    dots Submission Name: how i feel for youdots

    Author: UNunderStood
    ASL Info:    16/f/oh
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 79/87/25
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1139
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       all of this just poped in my head
    please commentor give me feedback

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    How i feel for you
    i tried to prolong my feeling for you
    for as long as i possibly could,
    i want to announce my love for
    you but i'm not sure i should.
    i have such a great amount of
    Anticipation built up inside
    And at this point it's Getting
    to hard to hide.
    I have such a fascination for
    You like this is just a fling,
    i get so excited when i see you
    into your arms i just wanna spring.
    Now more and more my love for you
    Gradually grows stronger,
    i wanna emerge through all boundaries,
    I can't wait no longer.
    My love for you in a million years
    still wont stop,
    And on my list of lovers
    You'll always be on top...

    Submitted on 2004-12-09 14:24:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it. It wasn't to bad. I understand where you are coming from. The emotion is felt in here. Good write keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2004-12-09 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]
      i only like the line"on my list of lovers/youllalways be ontop" ikd why i dont like the rest...that part just stuck with me...maybe its bc the way you wrote it...i would go back through and type it the way that you would say it...but yea your going for the rhymes at the ends so that wouldnt work...its ok just not my cup of mountain dew

    | Posted on 2004-12-09 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]

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