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    dots Submission Name: realizing helldots
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    Author: poetsoul
    ASL Info:    17/f/cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 109/151/32
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 228
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    dotsrealizing helldots
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    i fell asleep
    on the lonely way home.
    i dreamed of you,
    and it turned into a nightmare.
    i could only see the bad times,
    and they seemed to get worse.
    then i remembered the last time i saw your tired face.
    i jerked awake.
    just intime to see the flash
    of bright lights ,
    directly in front of me.
    it only hurt for a second,
    then i became numb.
    i was wheightless,
    flying down slowly past faces
    of the people i never loved.
    then,.... i saw your face.
    i lived in a world of pain
    since the moment i saw your face.
    it was then that i realized

    i never loved you





    Submitted on 2004-12-09 15:29:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      weightless isnt spelt quite right but wow... this is such a scathing "i never really loved you anyways" kinda write...
    the way your life flashes before your eyes and you see those you never loved... thats an interesting turn of events... usually when your life flashes before your eyes the movies depict all these lovely soft warm fuzzy daddy and daughter at the park kinda scenes... im wondering what kind of revelation that would be to have just as you die... that you never loved him... id imagine it would be one of regret... that you wasted so much of your now ending life on someone you didnt really love at all... well done... good write
    | Posted on 2004-12-09 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...this is a great poem expresses sorrow and a little hate great write need to see some more
    but what does this mean??
    of bright lights ,
    directly in front of me.
    it only hurt for a second,
    then i became numb.
    i was wheightless,
    flying down slowly past faces
    hmmm... pm me sometime
    instant fave
    | Posted on 2004-12-09 00:00:00 | by shattered_dream | [ Reply to This ]



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