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    dots Submission Name: Deluded Atrocitydots
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    Author: MedeaPyralis
    ASL Info:    18+F+Ga
    Elite Ratio:    2.78 - 12/14/18
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 968
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 542



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       Boredom stoke.


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    dotsDeluded Atrocitydots
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    She doesn’t believe
    In the beauty inside
    When she looks at her reflection
    All she sees is a lie
    A new distorted image
    Another ugly mass
    Feeding these falsities
    She thinks reside in the glass
    She molds herself to perfection
    Yet still yearns to be more
    Never thinking she’s good enough
    There’s always something else to deplore
    She keeps on striving
    Until you can barely see her
    Just another shattered image
    In another broken mirror




    Submitted on 2004-12-09 20:28:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very... contemporary. I did like the last line very much so...

    "Just another shattered image
    In another broken mirror"

    Kind of makes me think of "that's the way the cookie crumbles" for some reason even though they don't mean the same thing lol... But I guess this is a good piece, though I'm not really good at judging contemporary work. See you around!
    | Posted on 2004-12-09 00:00:00 | by Bijou de Mort | [ Reply to This ]


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