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a look into the Soul


Author: morte
ASL Info:    17/female/earth
Elite Ratio:    4.7 - 430 /348 /55
Words: 99
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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a look into the Soul


Eyes are windows into the soul
My eyes are like broken windows
My soul torn by the shards of glass
Boarded up and long forgotten

My eyes are like broken windows
Reality glimpsed through cracks
Boarded up and long forgotten
Twisted until fantasy seems true

Reality glimpsed through cracks
My soul seems out of focus
Twisted until fantasy seems true
Glass reflecting nothing in the dark

My soul torn by the shards of glass
Twisted until fantasy seems true
Glass reflecting nothing in the dark
Eyes are windows into the soul




Submitted on 2004-12-09 20:48:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  you did not rhyme hardly at all, but i did notice that you used the same words repeatadly for the ends of your sentances...creative. i like this one...but not nearly as much as your other works. i admire the style, and creativity, but i think that you could "elaborate" i guess, instead of repeating the lines over and over again throughout the poem. none the less, it is good and creative. great work.
| Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by Podenco del infierno | [ Reply to This ]
  Wonderful poem, reflecting the fight between reality and fantasy, and showing the spectra of feelings in your soul. No doubt, the eyes are the magical windows, always glowing with all the truth we hide inside. Well done, keep up your creative spirit!
| Posted on 2005-01-15 00:00:00 | by Dana | [ Reply to This ]
  Excellent job. Much morbid admiration...I loved it. Once I realized the fullness of the meaning, I stopped and hurt for you...whatever has caused you to become broken...I wish you the best. However, you make a bad situation into a great one by posting a deep and flowing poem for everybody online to enjoy. Wonderful.
| Posted on 2004-12-09 00:00:00 | by wanderingpoet16 | [ Reply to This ]
  I really, really enjoyed this piece. I would have like to have seen more punctuation being entertained, but other than that, fabulous work! I'm for sure going to add this to my favourites list. Superb work, my friend.
| Posted on 2004-12-09 00:00:00 | by Bijou de Mort | [ Reply to This ]
  I really, really enjoyed this piece. I would have like to have seen more punctuation being entertained, but other than that, fabulous work! I'm for sure going to add this to my favourites list. Superb work, my friend.
| Posted on 2004-12-09 00:00:00 | by Bijou de Mort | [ Reply to This ]
  I really, really enjoyed this piece. I would have like to have seen more punctuation being entertained, but other than that, fabulous work! I'm for sure going to add this to my favourites list. Superb work, my friend.
| Posted on 2004-12-09 00:00:00 | by Bijou de Mort | [ Reply to This ]


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