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    dots Submission Name: a look into the Souldots
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    Author: morte
    ASL Info:    17/female/earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.7 - 430/348/55
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsa look into the Souldots
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    Eyes are windows into the soul
    My eyes are like broken windows
    My soul torn by the shards of glass
    Boarded up and long forgotten

    My eyes are like broken windows
    Reality glimpsed through cracks
    Boarded up and long forgotten
    Twisted until fantasy seems true

    Reality glimpsed through cracks
    My soul seems out of focus
    Twisted until fantasy seems true
    Glass reflecting nothing in the dark

    My soul torn by the shards of glass
    Twisted until fantasy seems true
    Glass reflecting nothing in the dark
    Eyes are windows into the soul




    Submitted on 2004-12-09 20:48:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you did not rhyme hardly at all, but i did notice that you used the same words repeatadly for the ends of your sentances...creative. i like this one...but not nearly as much as your other works. i admire the style, and creativity, but i think that you could "elaborate" i guess, instead of repeating the lines over and over again throughout the poem. none the less, it is good and creative. great work.
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by Podenco del infierno | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderful poem, reflecting the fight between reality and fantasy, and showing the spectra of feelings in your soul. No doubt, the eyes are the magical windows, always glowing with all the truth we hide inside. Well done, keep up your creative spirit!
    | Posted on 2005-01-15 00:00:00 | by Dana | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent job. Much morbid admiration...I loved it. Once I realized the fullness of the meaning, I stopped and hurt for you...whatever has caused you to become broken...I wish you the best. However, you make a bad situation into a great one by posting a deep and flowing poem for everybody online to enjoy. Wonderful.
    | Posted on 2004-12-09 00:00:00 | by wanderingpoet16 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really, really enjoyed this piece. I would have like to have seen more punctuation being entertained, but other than that, fabulous work! I'm for sure going to add this to my favourites list. Superb work, my friend.
    | Posted on 2004-12-09 00:00:00 | by Bijou de Mort | [ Reply to This ]
      I really, really enjoyed this piece. I would have like to have seen more punctuation being entertained, but other than that, fabulous work! I'm for sure going to add this to my favourites list. Superb work, my friend.
    | Posted on 2004-12-09 00:00:00 | by Bijou de Mort | [ Reply to This ]
      I really, really enjoyed this piece. I would have like to have seen more punctuation being entertained, but other than that, fabulous work! I'm for sure going to add this to my favourites list. Superb work, my friend.
    | Posted on 2004-12-09 00:00:00 | by Bijou de Mort | [ Reply to This ]


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