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    dots Submission Name: For Poedots
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    Author: Bijou de Mort
    ASL Info:    16/M/TN
    Elite Ratio:    4.42 - 153/108/24
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       This is just a quick verse I wrote one day to honour the father of american literature, Edgar Allan Poe.


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    dotsFor Poedots
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    “For Poe”
    (2004)
    Bijou de Mort




    For the thousand worries
    Of lucid just,
    Slain, o’er the melancholy dust,
    Of tale— insatiable lust
    And freed from wind—
    Wretched gust!
    For ah!
    The thousand worries
    Of lucid just.
    No matter of formality
    Meant here in a spat.
    For betrayal by script
    Defied le Poe,
    Freed from wind—
    Wretched gust!
    For ah!
    The thousand worries
    Of lucid just.




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      Well, this was a bit of a struggle for me. I'm coming to realize that my own poems are too obvious; they don't challenge the reader to reach for the meaning. On the other hand, I've always disliked obscurantism. (try to use THAT word in a poem.) When I can't understand a poem, I reread it several times. I finally understood this one, and admire the economical use of language. I do think it taxes the reader's understanding, but does not go too far in making us reach for the meaning. Although not as lyrical as my personal taste, it is extremely cleverly written, and demonstrates a true commitment to writing as craft and art. I hope that reading more poems like this will improve my abilities at both writing and reading poetry, and I will continue to use your poems as a source. Thanks.
    | Posted on 2005-05-30 00:00:00 | by fredmelden | [ Reply to This ]
      sorry i cant criticize, u. poe is my fav. writer, and i love that u wrote this in honor of him. it even seems like something he would write. it is very well written
    | Posted on 2005-04-02 00:00:00 | by floating_pain89 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! is the first word that came to my mind...i loved it, the whole idea behind it is very creative...the wording is great and it flows very smoothly, not a hint of awkwardness...i like the repetition (which someone critisized you for)...anyway great job, keep it up...sorry i don't have any helpful suggestions
    | Posted on 2004-12-10 00:00:00 | by morte | [ Reply to This ]
      I can't say I have any critism, Edgar Allen Poe has always been my favorite Writter, thank you for this excellent, piece dedicated to him.
    | Posted on 2004-12-09 00:00:00 | by Karios | [ Reply to This ]
      Father of American literature? There have been lots of those, Mark Twain included. Ah, but Mark Twains most famous writes (Tom Sawyer and Huckleberry Finn) were excrutiatingly boring, and Poe's were a lot better.

    This was a bit repetitive, and I see that it might of work if you would have split it up into different stanza's, sort of like:

    For the thousand worries
    Of lucid just,
    Slain, o’er the melancholy dust,
    Of tale— insatiable lust

    And freed from wind—
    Wretched gust!
    For ah!
    The thousand worries
    Of lucid just.

    For ah!
    The thousand worries
    Of lucid just.
    No matter of formality
    Meant here in a spat.
    For betrayal by script
    Defied le Poe,

    Freed from wind—
    Wretched gust!
    For ah!
    The thousand worries
    Of lucid just.

    But it was good either way. And I did enjoy the way that you wrote in the format that Poe used to, what with the olden english words like "o'er" and the exclamation marks and dashes. Plus, this really gives the reader the sense that you really like Poe.

    I liked his "The Tell-Tale Heart" okay, but I must say that as far as short stories go, Stephen Kings "Sorry, Right Number" was better, but that was written in the form of a script. You should check it out.

    Nice write, keep it up,

    =Meredith=
    | Posted on 2004-12-09 00:00:00 | by Maki Kyomada | [ Reply to This ]


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