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    dots Submission Name: Heartlessdots
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    Author: Maki
    ASL Info:    17/ female/ home
    Elite Ratio:    5.04 - 208/210/69
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
    Total Views: 868
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Well, yea that guy I wrote the love poem has just dropped me like a used toy so that's the explanation for this one...

    hope you like it... even a little.


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    dotsHeartlessdots
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    These eyes that stare at me, scare me.
    This mirror has to be a lie.
    I've sold my weak heart, to make it strong,
    So easily, I gave it away, the love looked so tempting,
    This LOVE made me do it!

    Hope fills this empty scope, only hope...
    only hope.

    My heart was stolen,
    I've yet to get it back,
    abandond I lay,
    heartless, a gaping hole I want
    unlocked, I wish I could
    buy it back...

    If only someone
    donated their affection,
    to create another heart
    and not run away and leave me
    without a heart again.




    Submitted on 2004-12-09 22:20:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like the thought of getting a new heart through growth and affection, its a really good poem, your heart was stolen and yet you cling to get stronger, to fill what was stolen
    | Posted on 2004-12-09 00:00:00 | by ceestyl | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes, yes. Breakup is hard. It feels like everything is falling apart into an endless abyss, life itself following the shattered remains of your once light heart.

    But time will pass, your heart will mend, though it will take more time to trust again. And when that someone comes along, your heart will sing a special song.

    So cheer up, smile, move on with your life. Soon you will see, it isn't much strife.

    ...Okay, that was a bit pointless. And off of the subject. -clears throat, embarassed- So, anyway, um, yeah. I liked this, it showed how you are in a lot of pain, and gave the reader a nice sense of how the writer feels. Nice,

    Keep it up,

    =Meredith=
    | Posted on 2004-12-09 00:00:00 | by Maki Kyomada | [ Reply to This ]


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