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    dots Submission Name: thingsdots
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    Author: k kin
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 56/51/12
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       thoughts on this.....i wanted to write something darker but changed my mind..still working on "simple'.


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    dotsthingsdots
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    Twilight haze to soothe the eye
    Weary spirit whispers a sigh
    Something that stirs inside does imply
    Is it not time to simplify

    There is a purpose to most things
    And the things we do reward brings
    But as naturally as the songbird sings
    Sweetest are the simplest things





    Submitted on 2004-12-09 22:22:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That's a real good focus piece. I think if you kept going it would be interesting to see what you come up with, however, the mood could be completely changed as you kept going. I'm really impressed at how well you did with the strict rhyming format. Good piece.
    | Posted on 2004-12-09 00:00:00 | by _proper_noun_ | [ Reply to This ]


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