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    dots Submission Name: best friendsdots
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    Author: POETRY
    ASL Info:    17/f/az
    Elite Ratio:    4.29 - 259/141/37
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 1670
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    Bytes: 374



    Description:
       This was a poem had fwritten for two of my best friends but one of those best friend had betrayed e and messed with my b/f it makes sense if you look at the poem BETRAYAL.


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    dotsbest friendsdots
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    Friends is what we'll always be
    Nobody else just you and me
    Through heartace and pain
    Through laughter of tears of joy
    For the good times and bad
    For times we wish we never had
    I love you and always will
    You mean the world to me
    Now I know its true god does make wonderful people
    Thats why he made you.




    Submitted on 2004-12-10 08:56:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey Thanks for the comment on my site. I liked this poem and after looking over some of your other ones I think you deserve a really awesome friend(or several). Its a very truthful realistic poem and it was enjoyable to read. <3Sarah J
    | Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by Sarah J | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem sounds good and all but i think that this poem would be for a boyfriend not a friend but don't get me wrong its ok to love your best friends nowing that you can literally tell them anything and they won't tell anyone else. but it was a nice poem
    ,Draco
    | Posted on 2004-12-10 00:00:00 | by Draco | [ Reply to This ]
      hey i like it!
    it sounds good and everything but im not to sure that it sounds good going to a friend..like it sounds more like a poem you would write to like a boyfriend or something but i don't know i might just be me
    well hey its good i added it to my favs just to let you know
    ~!ununderstood
    keep it up*
    | Posted on 2004-12-10 00:00:00 | by UNunderStood | [ Reply to This ]
      well don't know how other people feel but usually God should have a capital G but maybe thas just how i was taughtlol but ne ways Friends are suppose to be there forever sometiems its hard to find a true friend and when you find that one hold on..they may screw up time to time but i mean..we are humans
    | Posted on 2004-12-10 00:00:00 | by grinninggashes | [ Reply to This ]
      hey..alma-perdida commented here. LOL, she hardly ever gets on:P Shes one of my BEST friends and she is right, never take friendship for granted and dont trust *god* to make everything right. If you think the world of one of your friends, it will only hurt more in the end when they let you down...

    ->Dark
    | Posted on 2004-12-10 00:00:00 | by drk_angl_17 | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked the content..man, me and my best friend..my "sister" tho not in blood have been through so much and we both cant believe we're still so close...yeah..it's really nice to have someone like that..i hope you and that person stay that way..i know me an her are graduating this year and i bet we'll grow apart..please dont take it for granted..good luck
    | Posted on 2004-12-10 00:00:00 | by alma-perdida | [ Reply to This ]
      The content of this piece is not bad, showing your appreciation for a friend. However, the rhyming, whether intentional or not, is hit and miss. This is something that you should pay attention to. Either have a rhyming scheme or don't rhyme at all.
    The poem flows quite well until you hit the second to last line. Much to long for the rest of the poem, but could easily be cut in two to make an extra line.
    Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2004-12-10 00:00:00 | by arkay | [ Reply to This ]
      It does make perfect sense. It's a good poem. I'm sorry that yor friend messed up w/your b/f. Unfortunatly, there is no protection from your friends messing up and not being there when you need it. I have haad friends, who would tell you that they are your best buddies and they do something that they should have never done, stabe your back without a blink. But you still have your other friend, so it's not that bad. I hope that your friendship will last a lifetime.
    You have a very nice poem. Well done!
    THere is a lot of truth to your poem. Good word choice and flow is there.
    Well done! keep it up!
    Olianna
    | Posted on 2004-12-10 00:00:00 | by Olianna | [ Reply to This ]


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