Description: sometimes i just want people to ignore what i do in actions but i don't want them to ignore me
please give me some feed back or comments about what ya think
ignore me -------------------------------------------
I cry,
ignore me.
I scream,
ignore me.
I cut,
Ignore me.
I bleed,
Ignore me.
The pain biulds up,
Ignore me.
I'm slowly fading with my eyes open,
Ignore me.
I need you,
Please don't ignore me.
The pain builds up, fading with my eyes open, I need you. Please don't ignore me.
The way you did it worked but I don't think it sounded right the way you finished. Just me. Sorry to change your poem. It is yours. Good job with this though otherwise.
A frustrated soul, caught up in the darkness of life. Needs, wants, someone to talk to. Sometimes, her actions are a little unusual, and the way she deals with it all is 'not normal' by other people. But she needs a hand, someone to talk to who won't mock her actions. Good poem.
hmm...i dont think i understand what u mean by your discription (because that generally serves as an intro into the poem so if i didnt really get that...)wait i think i do. lemme read it again. u mean, when u do things and u say or do one thing, but inside u really want that person/any one to hear you or to care. i gotcha. if im rite. lol. i be feelin that way at times. well hold dat, more like most of the time...well whatever. it depends. this is actually a nice, short, poem. it does have a deeper meaning. and it makes u think. its sad how life works this way. why people feel the way they feel. and u presented it well in this way. just correct me if i dont hav a clue--or if we arent on the same grounds.
Submission Name: ignore me
