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    dots Submission Name: ignore medots
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    Author: UNunderStood
    ASL Info:    16/f/oh
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 79/87/25
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1052
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 292



    Description:
       sometimes i just want people to ignore what i do in actions but i don't want them to ignore me
    please give me some feed back or comments about what ya think


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    I cry,
    ignore me.
    I scream,
    ignore me.
    I cut,
    Ignore me.
    I bleed,
    Ignore me.
    The pain biulds up,
    Ignore me.
    I'm slowly fading with my eyes open,
    Ignore me.
    I need you,
    Please don't ignore me.




    Submitted on 2004-12-10 11:14:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This could very easily be a four line poem. Look:


    I cry, I scream, I cut, I bleed.
    You ignore me.

    The pain builds up, fading with my eyes open, I need you.
    Please don't ignore me.

    The way you did it worked but I don't think it sounded right the way you finished. Just me. Sorry to change your poem. It is yours. Good job with this though otherwise.
    | Posted on 2004-12-10 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      A frustrated soul, caught up in the darkness of life. Needs, wants, someone to talk to. Sometimes, her actions are a little unusual, and the way she deals with it all is 'not normal' by other people. But she needs a hand, someone to talk to who won't mock her actions. Good poem.
    | Posted on 2004-12-10 00:00:00 | by Dark_Dancer | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm...i dont think i understand what u mean by your discription (because that generally serves as an intro into the poem so if i didnt really get that...)wait i think i do. lemme read it again. u mean, when u do things and u say or do one thing, but inside u really want that person/any one to hear you or to care. i gotcha. if im rite. lol. i be feelin that way at times. well hold dat, more like most of the time...well whatever. it depends. this is actually a nice, short, poem. it does have a deeper meaning. and it makes u think. its sad how life works this way. why people feel the way they feel. and u presented it well in this way. just correct me if i dont hav a clue--or if we arent on the same grounds.
    | Posted on 2004-12-10 00:00:00 | by MizCandy05 | [ Reply to This ]


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