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Somewhere Under the Rain Cloud


Author: painofthanatos
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Class/Type: Lyrics /Comedy
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This is what happens when my friend is singing as I am bored out of my friggin mind in creative writing. lol


Somewhere Under the Rain Cloud



Somewhere under the rain cloud
Way down low
There's a land that I heard of
Once in a Eulogy
Somewhere under the rain cloud
Death is real
And the nightmares that you fear to dream
Really do come true
Some day I'll wake up six feet under
And wake up where the clouds are high above me
Where troubles bust me like the cops
Away above the chimney tops
That's where you'll find me
Somewhere under the rain cloud
Penguins and Chickens fly
Bats fly right through the rainbow
Why then, oh why can't I?
Some day I'll wish upon a star
And down it will come crashing right on to me
Where troubles suck like lemondrops
Away below the chimney tops
That's where you'll burn me
Somewhere under the rain cloud
People die
Birds fly over the rainbow
Why then, oh why can't I?
If dying little yellow jackets fly
Beyond the rainbow
Why, oh why can't I?




Submitted on 2004-12-10 11:49:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I so did not start singing this in my head!Okay, maybe I did, but you must understand I am not all there.

I think they removed half my brain while I was sleeping...or not...

You never know what Kim will do for kicks. Lol, naw, she is super...I will probably have this song stuck in my head for the rest of the day, the original. But it doesn't matter, I'm used to breaking out in song at the wierdest momments. Well, I'm going to leave you alone now!

Me! Bonnie
| Posted on 2005-01-28 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]
  pretty good, I really liked the dualism, if thats what it is. or maybe its ...idk the word escapes me, but I like how its talking about death, but it takes about rainbows and lemondrops. The begining sounds familar, is it from a song, other then that very original . its almost ironic. The ryhme scheme is off and on but it stays the same scheme so fix that and your good.
Spartan
| Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by Spartan | [ Reply to This ]
  pretty good, I really liked the dualism, if thats what it is. or maybe its ...idk the word escapes me, but I like how its talking about death, but it takes about rainbows and lemondrops. The begining sounds familar, is it from a song, other then that very original . its almost ironic. The ryhme scheme is off and on but it stays the same scheme so fix that and your good.
Spartan
| Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by Spartan | [ Reply to This ]
  Funny, I liked where you said:

"Penguins and Chickens fly
Bats fly right through the rainbow
Why then, oh why can't I?"

Its full of hilarium, it really is... KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!
| Posted on 2004-12-11 00:00:00 | by Siren Mengana | [ Reply to This ]
  that was different, I liked it. You used some great friggin words, and at the same time they didn't make a whole hundred percent sense. I liked that, it managed to be funny and "darK" all at the same time. very kewl.
| Posted on 2004-12-10 00:00:00 | by bleedbroken | [ Reply to This ]
  bee-a-u-tee-ful, I liked this one alot, it had a nice flow, i liked it because, well i did...it seems to carry some hope in it...this may sound silly, but I sang it out loud...i'll admit my voice is horrible, but even with me singing it, it still sounded amazing...that's telling you something.Great write.
camoflage
| Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by camoflage | [ Reply to This ]


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