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    dots Submission Name: The student confessiondots
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    Author: shombray
    ASL Info:    18/F/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    5.31 - 103/91/26
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 816
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       I want anyone that can relate to it . Iwant brutal honesty good or bad.


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    dotsThe student confessiondots
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    What do you see when you look at me?
    A nerd with a great mind
    Which is really hard to find
    A goal setter who knows that obstacles stand in the way
    But will not let anyone take my dreams away
    A thankful person that appreciates the simple life
    And loves to be extra sweet and nice
    A person who turns in everything on the exact time and date
    Because the wrong thing to do is procrastinate which means you do everything late
    But most of all you should see
    That there is good intentions in me
    Hopefully you will see this when you look at me
    This is a very sincere apology
    But please don't give me that failing 50!




    Submitted on 2004-12-10 14:24:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      the poem sounds great since you reworded it
    i have asked simulare questions myself so are you a senior this year? or did you graduate this summer? anyways keep up the good work
    kristen
    | Posted on 2005-05-28 00:00:00 | by darkonesgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Thank you for reading this poem and being honest like I asked for. I like the way you re- worded my poem.Good idea . Thanks.
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by shombray | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, I liked it. The only thing that kinda bothered me was this :

    A goal setter who knows that obstacles stand in the way
    But will not let anyone take my dreams away

    It wasnt bad or anything, but the "my" seemed out of place there. Everywhere else you are talking about "A person" so maybe it could have been..something like this :

    A goal setter who knows that obstacles stand in the way
    But will not let anyone take those dreams away

    something like that, maybe. Just in my opintion.
    | Posted on 2004-12-10 00:00:00 | by sone | [ Reply to This ]


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