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    dots Submission Name: Sometimesdots

    Author: shombray
    ASL Info:    18/F/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    5.31 - 103/91/26
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Sometimes she makes you mad
    Sometimes he makes you sad
    Both hearts have been used by others
    But the sweetest thing is the love that you both have for each other.
    Afraid to take that second chance
    For you have been on the rollercoaster of romance.
    So as both of you walk down the aisle holding hands
    You become the greatest women, and he becomes the greatest man

    Submitted on 2004-12-10 14:52:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      im probably becomeing annoying by now and im sorry for that but the more poems i read by you the more i become intrigued ive only allowed my self to love one person and that was over 2 years ago my current b/f just said those three words and it scared me cause i care for him im just scared to realize how much but this poem has gave me currage in that part so hopefully everything will work out oh well keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2005-05-28 00:00:00 | by darkonesgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      seriously you are the like the smartest person when it comes to love and relationships your really good. your poems show the bad and the good of relationships. i love how you see things its great
    | Posted on 2005-05-27 00:00:00 | by Natie | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a good piece, i like how it was light, and meant so much. you really put a lot into a couple of words. it's amazing how you can sum things up so easily. keep up the good work, i really think this was good.
    | Posted on 2005-06-01 00:00:00 | by bluecrane | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really special in a way and it reminds me of when Doris jean and I first got married. I felt like she was the only woman that was on the face of the earth. Don't get me wrong I do like to look and she knows it ,but, she was then and still is the only woman on earth for me. so in that way I can certainly relate to what uou are say'n here.
    Have a great day!
    | Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      Well the whole poem is intended on how you feel. If you really want you know what those lines meant then they meant that you are willing to take a second chance at love even though you have been hurt previously.
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by shombray | [ Reply to This ]
      this was a nice poem, it lifted my spirits a bit. its short but beautiful, you wrote it well, great write, keep it up, i'd love to see more soon
    | Posted on 2004-12-10 00:00:00 | by poetsoul | [ Reply to This ]
      Hello, this was a sweet short poem. I thought it was pretty cute. I like:

    Afraid to take that second chance
    For you have been on the rollercoaster of romance.

    If im getting this right -Its awful how many people deal with divorce, and taking that second chance is always a risk in their minds. Good write
    | Posted on 2004-12-10 00:00:00 | by sone | [ Reply to This ]

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