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    dots Submission Name: Something to live for...dots
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    Author: Pyrosis
    ASL Info:    24/M/TN
    Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 199/204/35
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       i don't know alot of things that have been happening recently inspired me to write this.. though i really doubt i said everything on my mind..
    well it dosen't matter.. bash it all you like i'm open tonight.. hope someone appreciates what i was at least trying to say..

    Adam


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    dotsSomething to live for...dots
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    The things we hold most dear can vanish in one instant of pain and suffering
    Our most cherished moments.. Our most beloved friends...
    They can become ash before we even say goodbye

    Yet..
    Is it not the time you had and the time you do have, that really matters
    The thought of knowing you could still make another smile
    Even when you are bleeding inside
    Knowing you can be there when another hurts as you have
    And believing that you can somehow... make it easier

    We are all a sanctuary
    Even if we cannot see it
    With every breath we take we can give hope to another
    With every day that passes
    We can sleep in knowing we fight for something

    The belief in knowing we are a place another can find peace
    The wonder of knowing we are the same in the end
    And the undeniable truth that true love never dies

    Is it not something to give hope
    Is it not something to live for...




    Submitted on 2004-12-10 19:41:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yes itis great to To help others. You may not be abel to do sometihng because it hurts and ou have the hope of helping someone in the same boat. Well Adam let me give you a little tip. Dont always help the people around you. You still need to help yourself. You say you cant Love, but you can still make others smile. Well here is a challange; Make me smile, put a grin on my face as I know now that you cant or dont want to love. Loving somone or sometihng isnt bad. Yes Helping people is great, but dont forget about yourself. When I first talked to you a long time ago, you were about to give everything up to please your parents and put a smile on their face. You got over that and started think about yourself too, what you wanted to do and what made you smile. Now you are going back to forgeting about yourself. Please, just for one minute dont think about other people, and think about yourself. How can you make people happy when they knw you are sad.
    I somehow think that this was my fault, and if I am wrong please tell me so, and tell me what got you like this again. Please just think about what you want, and stop at nothing to get it. You need to do something for yourself.
    I woud like you to remember something that I told you about a month after we first met. That night...when you actually talked to me..I had a gun ready to shoot. You may not think it much but when you talked to me, I put it down. I have told you that. I dont know maybe this is a waste of time. and if it is Im sorry I am still rambling. But Adam, I love you. And I dont like knwing that you are sad.
    So take up on my challange, knowing you are sad do you think you can make me smile?
    If I am wasting your time by saying all this tell me, and I will be sure to leave you alone. Because if you dont get the message behind it all, then at least I have tried.

    Jess
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by Kera | [ Reply to This ]
      Sorry, I was going to comment, but I got kicked off..you know how that is. -sigh- I added it to my favorites obviously. Sadly, I do know what you are trying to say, I am not sure whether I should be a little happy or a little sad about that, maybe a little of both. Heh, of course, I think I might have some kind of idea of what provoked this poem, but..I really like it. Thanks for being a good friend to me Adam. Much love always.

    Talked to Kevin, made up and everything. I think everything is fine. I hope...love ya.

    -Jess
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by Crimsonpathways | [ Reply to This ]
      Believe it or not, I'm sure many people appreciate your work. I know I do. Writing is appreciated by true writers on this site. :) And I loved this part,
    "With every breath we take we can give hope to another
    With every day that passes
    We can sleep in knowing we fight for something"

    That just struck a cord. Great write. :)
    -blt
    | Posted on 2004-12-10 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      i dont know if love on its own is enough to live for... i used to believe that with everything i had but then the boy i loved most ever killed himself... after telling me he loved me and would never do anything to hurt me... therefore i do not know if love is enough anymore.
    i do however like this write... the hope it brings... showing how our existance can mean something and we may not even realise that... that is very powerful... gives point to an otherwise pointless life...
    i find it comforting to know that i can use my somewhat awful life experiences to bring another hope... to help another through similar battles... i guess no matter how we feel... our lives are never lived in vain. thank you for a very inspiring read
    | Posted on 2004-12-10 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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