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    dots Submission Name: Rose Dust (Capital Lettering)dots
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    Author: secret moon
    Elite Ratio:    6.54 - 687/427/57
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsRose Dust (Capital Lettering)dots
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    Rose dust
    the forgotten petals that
    her Special Someone
    dropped (accidentally?) into the flames
    did He mean to give them to her
    instead?

    Rose dust
    and sometimes she wondered
    when it fell across her nostrils
    filling her throat and lungs with the
    powerful narcotic of reminiscence
    was it (accidentally) at all?
    Or
    did He forget her Upper-Case Day
    PURPOSEFULLY?

    most likely.
    these days, people with lower-case letters
    with their worn-out names
    never begin to make it in this world

    (they just end up becoming
    Rose dust)




    Submitted on 2004-12-10 21:30:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i actually got a lot of things out of this piece... more than i expected.

    it inched close to lower-case letters being the non-conformists, the indigenous people or the minority in general that seem to have a certain radiance that could aid the mental and spiritual growth of the world but were denied attention out of fear or the usual narrow-mindedness of those in power.

    in the area of love... this came across as a doomed affair for social reasons. the division could most likely be financial, social or political... it could also go to a religious level but that would seem unfair as to say that one religion appears weaker than the other. whatever it was, the line that separated them was quite powerful since it was able to make them deny their emotions, allow it to pass them by or be stoical with regards to its influence in a sense that the pain of “what-could-have-been” haunts them.

    i am, however, confused as to why you chose to capitalized the last rose. a personal reason, perhaps? or was it because you wanted to signify the importance of the rose as something that isn't part of the lower-case letters?

    i think it is safe to say that the rose dust is a symbol for those that have something to offer but were wasted. roses are beautiful but like everything else consumed by the flames of existence… it turns to ash that seems dissolve in the air… with its beauty lost.

    i think it is also safe to say that… this piece is brilliant and that it will not turn into rose dust quite easily.

    thank you for that.

    keep writing.
    | Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
      Being a superweird person, I looked up your reply to the above comments for help understanding this poem. i really liked the first stanza; the rest was confusing, but i understood things in little epiphanies. I think that the second time you say "accidently" it should have a question mark as well; otherwise it seems weird to keep just the word in parentheses.
    i'm not sure that i like the word "purposefully" in capitals. it does give a lot of emphasis, but i think having it on a line all by itself does that enough and it detracts from your overall commentary on upper/lowercase letters
    | Posted on 2004-12-18 00:00:00 | by dreamexandra | [ Reply to This ]
      OK, I liked this piece to tis fullest up until here:

    "Or
    did He forget her Upper-Case Day
    PURPOSEFULLY?

    most likely.
    these days, people with lower-case letters
    with their worn-out names
    never begin to make it in this world

    (they just end up becoming
    Rose dust)"

    The captial lettering through me off. I wasnt sure if you meant that no one spelled thier names in caps anymore because it wasnt "cool" and to do so would be to be an old prune. Thats the image I had at least. The ending was good, althoguh I didnt get it till my second read. The lower-case people all get their heart broken I suppose?

    Good write secret:O)

    --Kayla
    | Posted on 2004-12-14 00:00:00 | by Superman | [ Reply to This ]
      This is probably one of the most refreshingly different writes I've read in a while.
    For some reason immediately at home with the language, the phrasing and most importantly the idea.
    And yes abstract and maybe that's why - because I don't see any good reason why it should be easy.
    Delighted too that there's no description, no immediate handrail but the title is evocative and gives an important steer toward what to expect.

    I rarely leave without fafing with something and this is no exception because I think that some appropriately placed punctuation will bring more out of this. Like adding just the right amount of salt to a hard boiled duck egg...

    Rose dust:
    the forgotten petals that
    her Special Someone
    dropped (accidentally?) into the flames.
    Or did He mean to give them to her
    instead?

    Rose dust:
    and sometimes she wondered,
    when it fell across her nostrils,
    filling her throat and lungs
    with that powerful narcotic named reminiscence,
    was it (accidentally) at all?
    Or
    did He forget her Upper-Case Day
    PURPOSEFULLY?

    Most likely.
    These days, people with lower-case letters,
    with their worn-out names
    never begin to make it in this world.

    (they just end up becoming
    Rose dust)

    I really like the barely concealed shoulder-slumping misery that thoughtlessness can cause.

    I have been known to have issues with careless malice. This reminds me of some of them.

    Quite well enough thank you.
    Later,
    K
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha, I haven't been on this website for a long time and this is one of the first poems I've read in a long time and all I can say is Hell Yes.

    I love it, the mood and abstractness (I know it's not a word). And the rose dust. I love that, rose dust.

    It's pretty pictures.

    It sounds like the stuff I write but never show to anyone. Good to know I'm not the only one.
    | Posted on 2004-12-30 00:00:00 | by DewdropMartini | [ Reply to This ]


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