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    dots Submission Name: A Friend In Deeddots
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    Author: arkay
    ASL Info:    50+/m/Atl.Can
    Elite Ratio:    4.84 - 450/320/56
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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    Description:
       Friendships are hard to hold onto.
    Wouldn't it be nice if all friendships were like this?


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    dotsA Friend In Deeddots
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    Sharing of respect
    no homage is owed.
    Clinging to honour
    an objective code.

    Fashion to present
    all manor of trust,
    withholding no bone
    of contentious thrust.

    Freedom to play
    on words of wit.
    Knowing the line
    on which to quit.

    Caring enough
    to see it through,
    when times were tough
    from where we grew.

    Taking the time
    from a busy life
    to say “I’m here”
    in times of strife.

    Holding out hope
    when little is there.
    Sparing no words
    to bring us square.

    A time to settle
    never comes around.
    Nothing is owed
    to this we’re bound.

    None should be
    without this friend.
    Mine will be there
    to the very end.




    Submitted on 2004-12-11 15:19:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A true friendship is rare and priceless. Some never have this privilege to have. One must hold on to these kind of friends with ever fiber of their being. A good write!
    | Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really great poem for me. Six years ago I lost my best friend. She was only 49. We were totally inseperable and the loss I feel is like no other. The wording is perfect.
    | Posted on 2004-12-12 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this poem! WHat a great description of a good friendship! I liked how short the lines were...it made for a unique reading experience, cuz I am used to the long-lined poetry...So I give you thumbs up for originality, and you also did a great job with your topic too! Thanks alot!
    -Shawnothan
    | Posted on 2004-12-11 00:00:00 | by Shawnothan | [ Reply to This ]
      Thank for this, its nice to see someone celebrate frendship, as i feel friendship is somewhat underrated. You need friends before lovers, and your family to be both friends and relatives, if you see what i mean. I just got a call from a friend of mine, who i havent spoken too in a while, this poem just cried out at me. Also 'A friend in deed' reminds me of the song 'pure morning' by placebo, who i used to listen to WITH THIS FRIEND! thats really spooky, im touched. thanks for sharing, and may the friendships in your life long continue :)
    ellisa
    | Posted on 2004-12-11 00:00:00 | by ellisa | [ Reply to This ]
      So pleasant, so comforting- a true friend this would be indeed. Friends hold no debts, no grudges, and are unconditional. Such friends are hard to come by, and when they do last forever. This poem expressed that well, and was simple and easy to read. I especially liked the clever wit here...
    Knowing the line
    on which to quit.
    It's good, to know someone so well that you know just how far to take a joke. The writing here was good, and flowed well. The ryhming pattern was a bit traditional, but I guess that that would put more focus on the words themselves. Very enjoyable.
    -Ari
    | Posted on 2004-12-11 00:00:00 | by Ari Leukos | [ Reply to This ]


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