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    dots Submission Name: Finding Thoughtdots

    Author: arkay
    ASL Info:    50+/m/Atl.Can
    Elite Ratio:    4.84 - 450/320/56
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Written, re-written, re-written so many times.
    It must now stand or else be thrown.

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    dotsFinding Thoughtdots

    Truly a wonder this place we see
    When closing our eyes to search inside.
    Dreams undreamt overtaking us,
    Memories forsaken fall into stride.

    A time to cry, a time to sigh
    Of dreams undreamt we lust in wait.
    Should we have a time of rue
    Of memories forlorn we would partake.

    Beauties and demons walk hand in hand,
    Loving and tearing at what we know,
    Or hide in terror in some dark space
    Awaiting their chance from which to grow.

    Controlling their visions a futile quest.
    Knowing and showing to be their game
    Of enlightened thoughts that surely come
    From somewhere deep, in flickering flame.

    Words of wisdom randomly float
    Always in motion, often too quick
    To grasp and absorb as we might wish
    In our heads much too thick

    Wondering where this deep place lies,
    Surely within it should be found.
    Chances they will lead us there
    Never unfold, they keep it bound.

    Should they deem to fill our plate
    Devour quickly before too late.

    Submitted on 2004-12-12 10:27:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ha ha! Not too dopey as I'm in that state often.
    Thanks for reading and commenting. and especially glad that you were able to get such a fine picture from it.
    | Posted on 2004-12-12 00:00:00 | by arkay | [ Reply to This ]
      This to me describes the thought process of writing very well! It' all just dancing on the tip of your tongue...or pen.
    The stage where you try to reach into the hurricane of thoughts raging through your brain.
    Maybe tornado would be a better analogy...I think of Dorothy in the twister...seeing the bits and pieces of her life passing by the window.
    She sees just enough to keep her interest...but not enough to make sense.
    Thanks for a read I can
    (pardon the dopey but true comment...)
    really relate to! :D
    | Posted on 2004-12-12 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      This so profoundly describes the finding of thoughts, as the title suggests. Forever scrambling through our minds always elusive and not always making sense until we can catch them and put them on paper. Occasinally finding a way to refine them in our minds. This is a great write and I shall add it to my favs.
    | Posted on 2004-12-16 00:00:00 | by popsit | [ Reply to This ]

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