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    dots Submission Name: A Duty of a Frienddots
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    Author: eener
    ASL Info:    21/f/wi
    Elite Ratio:    5.55 - 351/370/53
    Words: 35
    Class/Type: Limerick/Friendship
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       Dedicated to a new friend, containing important messages for all. Gotta love limericks :)


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    dotsA Duty of a Frienddots
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    Chosen am I for you to trust and befriend.
    So defending your honor, I shall seek to end
    The punches they throw,
    Devastating each foe,
    By teaching you to kill with the kindness you send.




    Submitted on 2004-12-12 11:44:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It seemes as though some of these readers have missed the point you were trying to make, yet it seems so clear to me. Perhaps I'm just wrong.

    Like any limerick, this flows quite well, I don't know much about the rules, but I love how limericks are ruled.

    Random kindness is something more powerful than any switchblade, pistol, bazooka, or grenade, on or off the streets, in world war or gangster war...Kindness could end them all...are we wrong?

    The fact that you took kindness into the dark woods up against paradoxical words like foe and devestating, and punches...it really seemed to work, but it took some bal..err..boobies on yer part.

    Much appreciated write!

    MyX
    | Posted on 2004-12-21 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]
      this was great...kinda like love your enemy right...it drives them crazy! Ha-ha!
    you've got a lot of control (for lack of a better word) with your style...gotta love it!
    | Posted on 2004-12-18 00:00:00 | by calling eve | [ Reply to This ]
      Heh heh. Thank you *smiles*. The third poem only, in my lifetime, that has been written for me. You are truly a friend, and I respect that. Devastating with the kindness that I send eh? *smiles* Well, as you have seen, that kindness has been on vacation these past few days. If on1eday.co.uk syas anything else to me, heh...I will break him. Simply put, and move to another poetry site.

    One shouldn't have to deal with this. That idiot has 3 poems written. I have 487 written to date, plus anoth 613, which shall never be posted. I just felt, disrespected that he would comment...he's no poet...

    But you didn't write this to hear me rant. I am just getting some things off my chest . It felt good to hear these words as read aloud. I can't comment on the form or anything, for one it was a limerick . And secondly, because this was something personal, something to be prided in, for it was from the Heart. I Thank You, and do Take Care.

    "Loquacious Mind"
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by Loquacious Mind | [ Reply to This ]
      If more people were like you rather than the foes you aim to devastate, the world would be a much better place. And I like how you seek to teach your friend to kill with kindness rather than 'throwing punches.' Nice job. I don't think I've ever seen such a short piece from you. You did a great job-how does it feel?
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by ber | [ Reply to This ]


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