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    dots Submission Name: Guiltdots
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    Author: Holy Wood
    ASL Info:    27/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.44 - 179/198/52
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Fuck it all
    Total Views: 942
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       Too much guilt on my conscience right now


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    dotsGuiltdots
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    Tears of blood stain my face
    It's finally happened
    I've lost my faith
    To Hell my soul I send
    Damned from the beginning
    Lost in the end
    Too much sinning
    More than I can mend
    I take my life today
    Don't worry
    There's nothing you have to say
    No need to say sorry
    I want you to feel bad
    Tear apart your heart
    Watch you being sad
    As your world falls apart
    For once I'll smile
    But you wont see it
    All the while
    I'll be loving it




    Submitted on 2004-12-12 18:44:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this poem, I don't agree that the subject is over done. Suicide is more and more commun, so I think we should be thinking about it more and expressing our feelings towards it. I'm not sure how i feel about how your blaming the other person and enjoying their sadness, it seems kind of spiteful. Overall I thought it was good though.

    Kacela Kali
    "Ha ha, you called your penis a wang!"
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by Kacela Kali | [ Reply to This ]
      this was well written i do give you that much. i agree wiht armand, that the whole suicide thing in general is getting very very old. it's sad that there are so many people writing about this topic. it's no way to live life. you composed this very well thought it was a good write** no harm intended by my opinions
    | Posted on 2004-12-12 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]
      Not bad the only thing I don't like is...it's another teenage suicide poem and this subject is being overdone.But for being what it is not bad one of the better ones I have seen on the subject. And sorry if my comment upsets you.
    Thanks.
    | Posted on 2004-12-12 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      great poem best part-

    Tears of blood stain my face
    It's finally happened
    I've lost my faith
    To Hell my soul I send
    Damned from the beginning
    Lost in the end
    Too much sinning
    More than I can mend
    I take my life today


    instant fave.
    | Posted on 2004-12-12 00:00:00 | by shattered_dream | [ Reply to This ]


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