Falling

Author: manicsmuse ASL Info:    28 Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 146 /161 /55 Words: 108

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Falling

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We know we are in common company, That brings comfort. But in the absolution of it, we conform to the inevitable, To the end. And a sorrow is born, like a falling leaf we tumble, to the cold ground below. We join the others, the fallen ones. What are the reasons of change? The turn of earths regeneration. This is the beauty of the beast. The complexity of growing old, and falling from greatness. We all shall grow again, breed vivrant life. In the seed of our own. The pleasure of ourselves. In a tiny recreation. In the birth of our children, the promise of life eternal.

Submitted on 2004-12-12 19:11:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I like the whay you portrayed the cycle of life: the fallen leaves and fallen people. This is both beautiful and depressing. I like the idea of children being immortality too. You need a comma in "earths regeneration" too, but that's no biggie at all. I think some of your commas at the ends of lines need to be periods too.

| Posted on 2004-12-12 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]

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