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    dots Submission Name: The sad love letterdots
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    Author: POETRY
    ASL Info:    17/f/az
    Elite Ratio:    4.29 - 259/141/37
    Words: 298
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       This was a letter I had written to my best friend who I fell deeply in love with and he knew how much I loved hm and he used me not only that went out with my best friend. I wrote this for him and I read it to him on the phone while I was crying while our song was playing because I learned I had to let go I hope you enjoy.


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    dotsThe sad love letterdots
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    You and I were so close but I dont know what happended.
    Look, I know I have done you wrong but you hurted me too, with or without that intentionyou did.
    I cant believe you had let me down.
    I told you everything I told you things I have not told anyone else and what did you do?
    You screwed me into the ground.
    You were my best friend.
    What ever you asked for I had gotted it for you. I was there every step of the way I defended you and everything.
    You knew I loved you and yet you wanted to only use me.
    I guess thats what happens when you fall in love with the wrong one.
    my friends would tell me all the time "all he ever did was use you and hurt you get over him" but that is easier to say then do.
    I guess since I have taken a deep fall that I cant say good-bye that easily.
    I am sorry that you couldnt have ecxepted me for me.
    I remeber one thing you and I agreed on and that was "no matter what we would always be...one..a whole"
    But I guess it was all a lie cuz of this big lie I no longer know the truth.
    I know out of all this it seems like I hate you and I do but at the same time I love you too.
    If that makes any sense.
    You cant be apart of my life anymore because this is jsut not a forgive and forget kind of thing.
    I fell for you and got cut real deep.
    But you know what they say:
    "you can't lose something you never really had"




    Submitted on 2004-12-12 22:18:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You did a great of making me feel lost of self-respect,his as well. Your letter was convey what happen so often in best friendship relationships were sensuality mixes with closeness of two people. You did take some of the blame which was classy. all through the letter you gave true insight, from how your friends and parents see his flaws,yet you are blinded by love and trust to see it.

    So overall you did a great job on the storytelling part. Yes like the others have said, some misspelling and typo's are needed.

    Keep writing and I will keep reading
    | Posted on 2004-12-14 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a really nice poem/letter that you wrote and you should keep writing there's only one mistake intentions and you are not spelled together.
    | Posted on 2004-12-14 00:00:00 | by Draco | [ Reply to This ]
      I can feel this as well, I've been in the midst of a very challenging situation and sometimes there seems nothing good comes from making the decision that needs to be made, its still to depressing to want to deal with, but you seem to know the correct path to take and the best way to deal with your feelings.Bravo
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]
      Few spelling errors but overall but looks like typos and on you hurted i think it should be you hurt me to but since this is a letter i dont' really think it matters and it really shows how you felt at the time :)
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by grinninggashes | [ Reply to This ]
      I know exactly how you feel. I was 15 when I fell in love for the first time. Now I'm 18 going on 19 and am still in love with him to this very day. He also [censored] on me. I gave him everything and he gave me nothing but heartache. I'm here to tell you that it never gets better. Good poem though by the way.
    | Posted on 2004-12-12 00:00:00 | by Holy Wood | [ Reply to This ]


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