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    dots Submission Name: love is never a fair gamedots
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    Author: WaxingPoetic
    ASL Info:    25 ~ Louisiana
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 493/563/100
    Words: 205
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 676
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    Description:
       I know these feelings don't mean much to the people that things like this happen to, but sometimes you really don't mean for things to happen, and when they do it only leads to hurt feelings and broken hearts. But sometimes that is just the way the mop flops... not to sound too harsh. I think the rhyme and flow is a bit uneven but it had been a while since I wrote something with a nice strong rhyme to it, figured it wuz time... so let me hear it!


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    dotslove is never a fair gamedots
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    Through no fault of my own, I have come between you.
    I did nothing but be his friend.
    He made the decision to stay by my side.
    I even tried to talk him out of it in the end.

    I just wanted to be there for him,
    The way he was always there for me.
    I wanted to listen when he talked about you.
    I knew number three was the oddball, and that was me.

    But now you hold it against me
    That I took care of him when you couldn't.
    I've forgiven you for those feelings, but you haven't,
    And I guess I understand if you think you shouldn't.

    To you, it would mean you've lost,
    And I won, even though it's not how I set out.
    I didn't mean for anything to happen.
    His heart was never on my route.

    It was never a competition,
    And if so, I still didn't want to win.
    But then things began to happen,
    We couldn't stay just friends.

    So please don't be upset with him,
    Love is never a fair game.
    I'm sorry for the way it has ended,
    But I really feel that no one is to blame.




    Submitted on 2004-12-12 22:21:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I've had this exact same situation happen to me. I've had this female friend in my life for many years and she's been my cloest friend throughout many relationships. She gir's would sometimes get upset when i'd spend time with her, going with her to open mic spots and such. But hay, they could have come and chilled. Whatever to them. Anyway their's an intersting story behind how me and this female friend of mine eneded up. I'll PM you with the detailes later. I'll bet you've have plenty of opinion for me on it. Look forward to it too.
    | Posted on 2005-02-04 00:00:00 | by spoken | [ Reply to This ]
      i thought that it was good. very straight-forward and honest. you have a good ear and eye for human emotion and a good way of putting it into words. i like the simplicity of your pieces, but there is also a deepness that is gently weaved in there. good piece. keep it up.
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by maquiladora | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting piece of writing here. the story itself reads so straight-forward and linear that it tends to overshadow any rhyme scheme at all that might be present. So rather than comment on a rhyme scheme or a structure that I payed little attention to, let me comment on the content which really was the order of the day here.


    I believe that men and women are two different things completely. In the way they think and the way they act or react to situations. I personally have never met a woman who did not know exactly where such a situation was going from the start. I believe that the protagonist in this story regreted hurting someone but knew excatly what she wanted from the start. Such is the nature of the beast.


    peace,
    mister fizzle
    | Posted on 2004-12-12 00:00:00 | by Mister Fizzle | [ Reply to This ]



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